Surreal Nature

As we walked along this summer day we could see the sun's passion etched within the peaks of small cottony clouds, it bled a scarlet ecstasy across the day's dealt skies. The air was scented with the fresh aroma of lilacs and roses from the houses nearby, yet a staleness lingered beneath its cover as we walked through grass less thick than the air. There were benches to our left, tucked in slight shade of an old oak. they seemed weathered in time, but still had yesterday's news draped atop the seats. We continued on our way and could see through thirsty fields along our path wheat as it danced to the wind's soft lullaby, we paused to watch nature's melody...

as wind brushes over
fields of wheat pull back covers
deer hidden within

We continued on our way down the windy road, our feet kept beat with the chatter of chipmunks as we kicked up dust from the once cobblestone path. The haze behind us lifted silently towards the sky, momentarily tucking the sun behind its shadows. Our ears could hear a rumble, almost as if angry skies were upon us, when we saw the river ahead of us...

over tops of stones
fast river stumbles along
in its wake fish jump




09/17/2013

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Date: 10/27/2013 1:12:00 AM
I can't believe I never saw this one before, sandy. It's just gorgeous. Guess what I did? I am such an idiot. I titled mine "fickle nature" instead of surreal. Arghhh. I wonder if it was just for that I got left off her list. Or maybe she just didn't like it!!!
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:34:00 AM
and thank you Andrea :) hugs
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:31:00 AM
perhaps...i remember yours, was a powerful write...
Date: 10/25/2013 5:03:00 PM
Exceptional winning work..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:33:00 AM
Thank you Sara :) hugs
Date: 10/25/2013 1:11:00 PM
I am sorry I have been out of the loop for so long, I hope I can back into sync soon but many congratulations on your win Sandra love xx
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:33:00 AM
Thank you so much Mandy :)
Date: 10/25/2013 10:43:00 AM
Congrats Sandra, awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT .
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:33:00 AM
Thank you Skat...enjoy your sunday :) hugs
Date: 10/25/2013 9:53:00 AM
Hi Sandra, nice one congratulations...PD
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:32:00 AM
thank you Linda :) hugs
Date: 10/25/2013 7:30:00 AM
Sandra so staggeringly beautiful congrats on a fine win Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:32:00 AM
thank you Shadow...hugs :)
Date: 10/25/2013 4:59:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, Sandra
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Date: 10/27/2013 7:31:00 AM
thank you :)
Date: 10/24/2013 8:30:00 PM
You have brought back a glimpse of a beautiful summertime day........just beautiful and the haikus are amazing!
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Date: 10/24/2013 9:02:00 PM
Thank you Carrie...this contest had many lovely haibuns :)
Date: 10/24/2013 6:03:00 PM
Yes a well deserved placement! Congratulations.
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Date: 10/24/2013 9:01:00 PM
Thank you Richard...we share a top spot I see :)
Date: 10/24/2013 5:23:00 PM
congrats on a great win Sandra
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Date: 10/24/2013 9:00:00 PM
Thank you Joseph :)
Date: 9/25/2013 10:30:00 AM
WOW...how scenic and romantic! lovely, lovely haibun Sandra. ^_^ Y.L.N
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:59:00 PM
thank you so much Yvette :)
Date: 9/22/2013 2:20:00 PM
Sandra ... Oh, this is so lovely ... I am not familiar with the poetry form Haibun, (I only write in about 5 forms myself) ... but I am so glad that I was introduced to this form by such a gifted writer. The structure is ascetically appealing and I will have to try it sometime. Your posting of this eloquent poem in lovely, descriptive images is inspiring ... A Poet Pal, MoonBee
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:59:00 PM
thank you...you should try one sometime...they are fun to write! :)
Date: 9/18/2013 4:53:00 AM
Beautifully penned haibuns, Sandra
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:58:00 PM
thank you :)
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