Notes About The Poem

For the Pick A Line And Like A Hooked Fish Run With It. Poetry Contest of John Lawless

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Surprise Birthday Party

Running with terror onto the lawn,
they gathered outside my house,
along with me and the birthday “boy,” my spouse.
No more celebrating in the dining room would be going on.
All my guests said bye and left, for simply having seen a mouse!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Babcock Avatar
May 10, 2024 at 10:22 AM
Cute one but I know the reaction cause I would want to leave too. Have a wonderful mother's day. love phyl
Empress Avatar
May 8, 2024 at 9:57 AM
Gosh! I can imagine , haha. Iv had some scary experiences with mice. And they werent very pleasant, so traumatizing. Clever ones they are. Very well written fun write for the contest. Best wishes sweet andrea
Volumes Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 2:51 PM
LOL Well they sure ran with it. This is a beaut poem my friend. I really did Laugh out loud.
Bayles Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 9:08 AM
Nice meter and humor.
Rodgers Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 7:23 AM
Dear Andrea, What a delightful whirlwind of humor and surprise. The imagery of fleeing guests and a sudden mouse sighting adds a playful twist to the scene. I loved your clever use of rhyme and rhythm, which hooks the reader from the first line and reels them in with each subsequent verse. Your ability to take a simple idea and run with it, turning it into a whimsical narrative, showcases your creative prowess. Best of luck in the contest! - Blessings, Daniel
May Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 5:29 AM
A squeaky surprise, That mouse was a party pooper!,
Buhagiar Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 10:12 PM
Fun poem? Seeing a mouse, I would have fled too. I hate those animals. Lovely rhyme though.
Wolf Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 8:29 PM
C'mon! No kidding! :) gw
Hawley Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 5:55 PM
Cute story there.
Kendrick Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 3:19 PM
A nice surprise ending to this one. Thanks for sharing it with us. With all the kitties you have, you should not have a mouse in the house. LOL..Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
Goldsmith Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 2:31 PM
So Cute. Next time invite the mouse to the party.... Hahaha!!! "Good Luck" Have a fun day................
Allison Avatar
May 6, 2024 at 2:30 PM
made me giggle thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan x
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