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For the Pick A Line And Like A Hooked Fish Run With It. Poetry Contest of John Lawless

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Running with terror onto the lawn, they gathered outside my house, along with me and the birthday “boy,” my spouse. No more celebrating in the dining room would be going on. All my guests said bye and left, for simply having seen a mouse!

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Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/10/2024 10:22:00 AM

Cute one but I know the reaction cause I would want to leave too. Have a wonderful mother's day. love phyl

Ink Empress

Date: 5/8/2024 9:57:00 AM

Gosh! I can imagine , haha. Iv had some scary experiences with mice. And they werent very pleasant, so traumatizing. Clever ones they are. Very well written fun write for the contest. Best wishes sweet andrea

Speaks Volumes

Date: 5/7/2024 2:51:00 PM

LOL Well they sure ran with it. This is a beaut poem my friend. I really did Laugh out loud.

Mike Bayles

Date: 5/7/2024 9:08:00 AM

Nice meter and humor.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/7/2024 7:23:00 AM

Dear Andrea, What a delightful whirlwind of humor and surprise. The imagery of fleeing guests and a sudden mouse sighting adds a playful twist to the scene. I loved your clever use of rhyme and rhythm, which hooks the reader from the first line and reels them in with each subsequent verse. Your ability to take a simple idea and run with it, turning it into a whimsical narrative, showcases your creative prowess. Best of luck in the contest! - Blessings, Daniel

Joseph May

Date: 5/7/2024 5:29:00 AM

A squeaky surprise, That mouse was a party pooper!,

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 5/6/2024 10:12:00 PM

Fun poem? Seeing a mouse, I would have fled too. I hate those animals. Lovely rhyme though.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/6/2024 8:29:00 PM

C'mon! No kidding! :) gw

Miranda Hawley

Date: 5/6/2024 5:55:00 PM

Cute story there.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/6/2024 3:55:00 PM

nicely done for the contest...light and witty and well written. Best wishes in the contest & have a great evening, hugs, Sara

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/6/2024 3:19:00 PM

A nice surprise ending to this one. Thanks for sharing it with us. With all the kitties you have, you should not have a mouse in the house. LOL..Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/6/2024 2:31:00 PM

So Cute. Next time invite the mouse to the party.... Hahaha!!! "Good Luck" Have a fun day................

Jan Allison

Date: 5/6/2024 2:30:00 PM

made me giggle thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan x