Surprise

What if the water, Fell apart then caught fire, And the ashes burned scars in our skin? When the wind took away, The pain we had gained, Would we remember how it felt to be burned? Would we remember how it felt for the wind to give us relief? Or would we wonder why it happened in the first place?

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Joanna Smith

Date: 3/2/2010 8:51:00 AM

great piece here and very thought provoking, i loved it. Jo

Jay Smith

Date: 9/30/2009 1:41:00 PM

This poem is based on the idea that everybody's perception is different. This poem asks what someone would focus on if a life-changing event unexpectedly happened. I would love some feedback please. .::James::.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/29/2009 4:21:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup James. I also wish you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/28/2009 3:23:00 PM

Different idea here. Keep writing. Sara