Surf

The sapphire surf is a lover and few can deny her a kiss that under her bosom hover. The sapphire surf is a lover and once lured beneath her cover, she swallows you in her abyss. The sapphire surf is a lover and few can deny her a kiss. 05/27/15 Submission for ONE LOVELY SUMMER TRIOLET Hosted by: Andrea Dietrich

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Joseph May

Date: 6/14/2015 6:17:00 AM

Congrats on a great win Preston

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/13/2015 8:30:00 PM

Your words match the visual well. Congrats on your win, Preston! Love, KIm

The Grahamburglar
Date: 6/13/2015 8:33:00 PM

Hi Kim, thanks for stopping by and commenting. =)

Skat A

Date: 6/13/2015 6:19:00 PM

this is a wonderful entry

The Grahamburglar
Date: 6/13/2015 8:33:00 PM

Thanks Skat. =)

John Lawless

Date: 6/13/2015 7:03:00 AM

The cadence of this rolls in like the surf bubbling on the beach. Congrats on the placement in the contest...well earned.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 6/13/2015 8:34:00 PM

Haha, even your feedback is poetic. Thanks for stopping by John. =)

Jan Allison

Date: 6/13/2015 5:29:00 AM

a beautiful triolet - congrats on your win Preston:-) hugs jan xx

The Grahamburglar
Date: 6/13/2015 8:34:00 PM

Hi Jan, thank you!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/13/2015 12:38:00 AM

this is SO unique. I just love the imagery here. THe beat was not iambic but it was a meter that worked very well and because you used it with consistency throughout the poem, this deserves a top placement. Congrats in my contest.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 6/13/2015 8:31:00 PM

Hey Andrea, thank you for hosting the contest, and for the high marks. I am honored and appreciate your kind feedback. =)

John Lawless

Date: 5/28/2015 9:41:00 PM

great job on the tricky triolet. Love the "hook" line ..."she swallows you in her abyss". Good luck in the contest.

Viv Wigley

Date: 5/27/2015 11:32:00 PM

Terrific first attempt, Preston, and those first two lines are crackers. ~7. Regards, Viv

The Grahamburglar
Date: 5/28/2015 6:18:00 PM

Thanks Viv, I appreciate the encouragement and kind words. =)