The Grahamburglar Poet Triolet

Surf

The sapphire surf is a lover  
and few can deny her a kiss 
that under her bosom hover. 
The sapphire surf is a lover  
and once lured beneath her cover, 
she swallows you in her abyss.  
The sapphire surf is a lover  
and few can deny her a kiss. 

05/27/15
Submission for ONE LOVELY SUMMER TRIOLET
Hosted by: Andrea Dietrich

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Joseph May June 14, 2015 at 6:17 AM Congrats on a great win Preston

Kim Merryman June 13, 2015 at 8:30 PM Your words match the visual well. Congrats on your win, Preston! Love, KIm The Grahamburglar June 13, 2015 at 8:33 PM Hi Kim, thanks for stopping by and commenting. =)

Skat A June 13, 2015 at 6:19 PM this is a wonderful entry The Grahamburglar June 13, 2015 at 8:33 PM Thanks Skat. =)

John Lawless June 13, 2015 at 7:03 AM The cadence of this rolls in like the surf bubbling on the beach. Congrats on the placement in the contest...well earned. The Grahamburglar June 13, 2015 at 8:34 PM Haha, even your feedback is poetic. Thanks for stopping by John. =)

Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 5:29 AM a beautiful triolet - congrats on your win Preston:-) hugs jan xx The Grahamburglar June 13, 2015 at 8:34 PM Hi Jan, thank you!

Andrea Dietrich June 13, 2015 at 12:38 AM this is SO unique. I just love the imagery here. THe beat was not iambic but it was a meter that worked very well and because you used it with consistency throughout the poem, this deserves a top placement. Congrats in my contest. The Grahamburglar June 13, 2015 at 8:31 PM Hey Andrea, thank you for hosting the contest, and for the high marks. I am honored and appreciate your kind feedback. =)

John Lawless May 28, 2015 at 9:41 PM great job on the tricky triolet. Love the "hook" line ..."she swallows you in her abyss". Good luck in the contest.

Viv Wigley May 27, 2015 at 11:32 PM Terrific first attempt, Preston, and those first two lines are crackers. ~7. Regards, Viv The Grahamburglar May 28, 2015 at 6:18 PM Thanks Viv, I appreciate the encouragement and kind words. =)