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May 25, 2024
Pick-A-Title, Vol 44 - Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh


 

Awestruck in its grandeur, acquiescing to mystic of refulgence up high, Exalted I feel, lauding designs iridescent, upon sapphire blue sky; As I listen to birdsongs, reverberating missives of sensuous eventide, Reminiscing in titillation of love, wishing you were here, by my side. Rippling currents strum, rhythms of river rushing, burbling nearby, When flocks of birds glide above, swooping and swirling, as they fly; Where decaying-day dons amber dye, as it slows the reign of time, Glinting aureate themes of twilight, blushing reveries of eve sublime. Cotton clouds on opaline fabric, embellish crown of mountain peak, As sunbeams waltz, with twirling leaves, playing hide-and-seek; To music of whispers-soft, emanating from tender melodies of breeze, In sync with mood of eve-romantic, dancing with the rustling trees. Vying enlightenment of self-actualization, I lie in quietude, supine, Harboring instincts of erudite mind, dwelling in teachings divine; Subjugating thoughts unwise, as fuchsia tinges dot magenta skyline, Where dream-scapes of you and I, on rosy arc of dusk entwine. Beckoned by your presence-seductive, beaming an esoteric smile, Your silhouette in yonder revels, flaunting allure of feelings fertile; Where together we rejoice realms of stars, blissful under moonlight, As, Venus, the goddess of love, confers upon us a romantic night.

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Date: 6/15/2024 4:38:00 AM
Beautiful, peaceful romance. Excellent writing Vijay :)
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Date: 5/30/2024 10:54:00 AM
Romance and the romantic fall into a category which only you know how to excite us your readers with, such talent. So well penned dear friend, Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/29/2024 5:43:00 PM
A very lovely imagery Vijay. I loved the alliteration too. Romance is my thing. Lol. I love to read about love, nature and everything that comes with it. " Your silhouette in yonder revels, flaunting allure of feelings fertile." astounding, Cheers.
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Date: 5/29/2024 8:51:00 AM
Very nicely penned Vijay, best wishes
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Date: 5/29/2024 6:57:00 AM
Another vividly descriptive and appealing blend of nature and romance, Vijay! Janice
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Date: 5/27/2024 4:44:00 AM
Very descriptive lines penned in this one. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:50:00 AM
So very kind of you to say so. Much appreciate your visit and thoughtful remarks, Sara--many thanks.
Date: 5/27/2024 3:49:00 AM
There is music in the air....to steal a verse from Abba. Magical flow of verses, with poetic assurances of a winner. Exceptional emotions.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:49:00 AM
Many thanks for your kind words, Victor--much appreciate.
Date: 5/25/2024 8:03:00 PM
So many moments linger within, as emotions tangle every word. The images you paint are breathtaking, Vijay. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. My best to you, my dear friend. Hugs, Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:49:00 AM
Glad you liked the poem, my dear friend. Always a delight when you visit, Brandy. Thank you for being there. Hugs to you as well.
Date: 5/25/2024 5:58:00 PM
This poem is absolute magic, Vijay. It is well composed, and has captivating imagery. It's a fave for me. Best wishes for a win! :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:47:00 AM
I am so honored by your kind words, my friend. Much appreciate your insights and your FAVE, Evelyn--many thanks.
Date: 5/25/2024 5:00:00 PM
Such beautiful imagery and rhyming lines, all of which added to your poem's depth. Yours is a captivating read written magnificently. I felt breathless after reading it....wishing you a splendid evening, Sara
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:46:00 AM
Much appreciate your visit and comments, Sara. Many thanks for your encouraging words.
Date: 5/25/2024 1:02:00 PM
Vigay, you crafted vibrant imagery and carefully crafted poetic structure skillfully combining the splendor of nature with deeply connected feelings in this poem. Themes of love and self-discovery enrich the poem's depth; they pay tribute to nature's beauty while delving into the poet's passionate innermost dreams. The use of vivid imagery and expressive language transports the reader on a mesmerizing literary journey that provokes wonderment and contemplation.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:45:00 AM
So nice to read that from a top poet on Soup. Much appreciate your kind remarks, my friend. Your thoughtful analysis is uplifting for everyone here on Soup. Many thanks, Lasaad.
Date: 5/25/2024 10:35:00 AM
"As sunbeams waltz, with twirling leaves, playing hide-and-seek; To music of whispers-soft, emanating from tender melodies of breeze," -- Love it! "Where together we rejoice realms of stars, blissful under moonlight, As, Venus, the goddess of love, confers upon us a romantic night." Nothing more beautiful than being in love -- If suspended my time by fate...then, Dear Lord, let my animation be love!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:43:00 AM
Spoken from the heart of a true believer of faith and love--you always dwell in wisdom words, Joe. Much appreciate your kind remarks--many thanks.
Date: 5/25/2024 10:06:00 AM
I like how your poem effectively blends natural beauty with deep emotional longing through its rich imagery and lyrical structure. The themes of romantic yearning and self-actualization add layers of meaning, making it both a tribute to nature's splendor and an intimate expression of personal and romantic aspirations. The use of colour, light, and dynamic descriptions creates a vivid and immersive reading experience, evoking both awe and introspection.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:40:00 AM
Always an honor to read your thoughts, my friend. Much appreciate your insights, as always, SO. Many thanks.
Date: 5/25/2024 5:38:00 AM
Dear vijay, i think this is one of my faves written by you again! So beautiful! And so picturesque while also expressing in such a soulfully poetic manner. Flowing with brilliant adjectives metaphors and word pairings! The last line really stood out for me too! “ As, Venus, the goddess of love, confers upon us a romantic night.” what a line to end it with! And i love “ As sunbeams waltz, with twirling leaves, playing hide-and-seek; To music of whispers-soft, emanating from tender melodie” mesmerizing! Ans magical! With exquisite alliterations so melodiously streaming with such artistic lines! “ Where dream-scapes of you and I, on rosy arc of dusk entwine.“ so heartfelt and passionate! Reminds me of my beloved! Left me in awe! From the very first line! You have a way with weaving words in a very captivating rhythm with catchy rhymes! A fave this is and for sure a top winner! Best wishes
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/27/2024 4:39:00 AM
I am humbled by your words of encouragement, Ink. Always a joy to read your thoughtful analysis, my friend. Much appreciate your kind words and your FAVE. Many thanks for your presence on my page.

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