Notes About The Poem

May 25, 2024
Pick-A-Title, Vol 44 - Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh


 

Supine, Looking at the Sky

Awestruck in its grandeur, acquiescing to mystic of refulgence up high,
Exalted I feel, lauding designs iridescent, upon sapphire blue sky;
As I listen to birdsongs, reverberating missives of sensuous eventide,
Reminiscing in titillation of love, wishing you were here, by my side.

Rippling currents strum, rhythms of river rushing, burbling nearby,
When flocks of birds glide above, swooping and swirling, as they fly;
Where decaying-day dons amber dye, as it slows the reign of time,
Glinting aureate themes of twilight, blushing reveries of eve sublime.

Cotton clouds on opaline fabric, embellish crown of mountain peak,
As sunbeams waltz, with twirling leaves, playing hide-and-seek;
To music of whispers-soft, emanating from tender melodies of breeze,
In sync with mood of eve-romantic, dancing with the rustling trees.

Vying enlightenment of self-actualization, I lie in quietude, supine,
Harboring instincts of erudite mind, dwelling in teachings divine;
Subjugating thoughts unwise, as fuchsia tinges dot magenta skyline,
Where dream-scapes of you and I, on rosy arc of dusk entwine.

Beckoned by your presence-seductive, beaming an esoteric smile,
Your silhouette in yonder revels, flaunting allure of feelings fertile;
Where together we rejoice realms of stars, blissful under moonlight,
As, Venus, the goddess of love, confers upon us a romantic night.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Singh Avatar
December 18, 2024 at 9:08 PM
Very nicely penned.Conhratulations on your win.
Ibeh Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 5:27 AM
Just a spectacular write, as usual. Bravo, Vijay. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
George Avatar
June 25, 2024 at 9:14 PM
Congratulations Jay, on your win.
Sands Avatar
June 15, 2024 at 4:38 AM
Beautiful, peaceful romance. Excellent writing Vijay :)
Proxenos Avatar
May 30, 2024 at 10:54 AM
Romance and the romantic fall into a category which only you know how to excite us your readers with, such talent. So well penned dear friend, Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
George Avatar
May 29, 2024 at 5:43 PM
A very lovely imagery Vijay. I loved the alliteration too. Romance is my thing. Lol. I love to read about love, nature and everything that comes with it. " Your silhouette in yonder revels, flaunting allure of feelings fertile." astounding, Cheers.
May Avatar
May 29, 2024 at 8:51 AM
Very nicely penned Vijay, best wishes
Canerdy Avatar
May 29, 2024 at 6:57 AM
Another vividly descriptive and appealing blend of nature and romance, Vijay! Janice
Kendrick Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:44 AM
Very descriptive lines penned in this one. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:50 AM
So very kind of you to say so. Much appreciate your visit and thoughtful remarks, Sara--many thanks.
Buhagiar Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 3:49 AM
There is music in the air....to steal a verse from Abba. Magical flow of verses, with poetic assurances of a winner. Exceptional emotions.
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:49 AM
Many thanks for your kind words, Victor--much appreciate.
Nicole Avatar
May 25, 2024 at 8:03 PM
So many moments linger within, as emotions tangle every word. The images you paint are breathtaking, Vijay. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. My best to you, my dear friend. Hugs, Brandy
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:49 AM
Glad you liked the poem, my dear friend. Always a delight when you visit, Brandy. Thank you for being there. Hugs to you as well.
Buehler Avatar
May 25, 2024 at 5:58 PM
This poem is absolute magic, Vijay. It is well composed, and has captivating imagery. It's a fave for me. Best wishes for a win! :)
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:47 AM
I am so honored by your kind words, my friend. Much appreciate your insights and your FAVE, Evelyn--many thanks.
Poet Avatar
May 25, 2024 at 1:02 PM
Vigay, you crafted vibrant imagery and carefully crafted poetic structure skillfully combining the splendor of nature with deeply connected feelings in this poem. Themes of love and self-discovery enrich the poem's depth; they pay tribute to nature's beauty while delving into the poet's passionate innermost dreams. The use of vivid imagery and expressive language transports the reader on a mesmerizing literary journey that provokes wonderment and contemplation.
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:45 AM
So nice to read that from a top poet on Soup. Much appreciate your kind remarks, my friend. Your thoughtful analysis is uplifting for everyone here on Soup. Many thanks, Lasaad.
DiMino Avatar
May 25, 2024 at 10:35 AM
"As sunbeams waltz, with twirling leaves, playing hide-and-seek; To music of whispers-soft, emanating from tender melodies of breeze," -- Love it! "Where together we rejoice realms of stars, blissful under moonlight, As, Venus, the goddess of love, confers upon us a romantic night." Nothing more beautiful than being in love -- If suspended my time by fate...then, Dear Lord, let my animation be love!
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:43 AM
Spoken from the heart of a true believer of faith and love--you always dwell in wisdom words, Joe. Much appreciate your kind remarks--many thanks.
One Avatar
May 25, 2024 at 10:06 AM
I like how your poem effectively blends natural beauty with deep emotional longing through its rich imagery and lyrical structure. The themes of romantic yearning and self-actualization add layers of meaning, making it both a tribute to nature's splendor and an intimate expression of personal and romantic aspirations. The use of colour, light, and dynamic descriptions creates a vivid and immersive reading experience, evoking both awe and introspection.
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:40 AM
Always an honor to read your thoughts, my friend. Much appreciate your insights, as always, SO. Many thanks.
Empress Avatar
May 25, 2024 at 5:38 AM
Dear vijay, i think this is one of my faves written by you again! So beautiful! And so picturesque while also expressing in such a soulfully poetic manner. Flowing with brilliant adjectives metaphors and word pairings! The last line really stood out for me too! “ As, Venus, the goddess of love, confers upon us a romantic night.” what a line to end it with! And i love “ As sunbeams waltz, with twirling leaves, playing hide-and-seek; To music of whispers-soft, emanating from tender melodie” mesmerizing! Ans magical! With exquisite alliterations so melodiously streaming with such artistic lines! “ Where dream-scapes of you and I, on rosy arc of dusk entwine.“ so heartfelt and passionate! Reminds me of my beloved! Left me in awe! From the very first line! You have a way with weaving words in a very captivating rhythm with catchy rhymes! A fave this is and for sure a top winner! Best wishes
Pandit Avatar
May 27, 2024 at 4:39 AM
I am humbled by your words of encouragement, Ink. Always a joy to read your thoughtful analysis, my friend. Much appreciate your kind words and your FAVE. Many thanks for your presence on my page.
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace