Sunsplash

Golden sun rise up Barely beyond water's edge I try not to peek Yesterday's blue ocean waves Leave me sunburned and sore Written for Entry to Rick Parise Sponsored Contest: Blue And Gold THEME NATURE'S TANKA

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/16/2011 7:53:00 PM

sunsplah, has my attention,,, wow! very unique... but painful..lol.. i need some banana boat lotion.... super enjoyed,..Linda

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/14/2011 11:20:00 PM

I enjoyed this one a lot. Very cool title for it.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 3/20/2011 10:27:00 PM

Sun screeen!!!! SPF 30! ha ha. Nice tanka, Joe. Can't wait to see how you place in that VERY competitive quest! Gwendolen

Susie Lambert

Date: 3/19/2011 6:50:00 PM

Beautiful!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/19/2011 5:28:00 PM

I did just this today, Joseph. Spent the entire day fishing from a pier and watching the sun rise over the water, seeing a vast blue ocean filled with jumping dolphins. Got the sunburn. Argh! Beautiful image though. It truly is a spiritual experience being on the water like this. Thanks for writing, my friend. If this is for Rick's gold and blue contest, I think it's a winner. Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/19/2011 4:17:00 AM

Joseph am waiting for these lines to come true as Summer arrives slowly but surely luv..my favorite time of year and your Tanks and title say it all .. wonderfully expressive ..luv..