Kabuteng P.Ink K. Poet Free verse

Sunset At Manila Bay

Walking on the street,
stretching out both my arms
to catch the breeze
looking silly, 
but I don't mind...
'silly' could very well be my middle name...

Closing my eyes as the 
sun was dipping goodbye
just for a quick bit though,
(I reckon I'm not that silly), 
since I wasn't walking on a sidewalk, 
since there was none in that part...

wishing I was sitting instead, 
or in that place 
where I can swim 
in that Manila Bay sunset, 
immerse myself
stare, 
drink that shimmering orange yolk
that bleeds light
watching it dip softly 
into the languid waves,
rendering brilliance,
 gilding everything

a golden inked cookie
from the milky sky
being dunked,
tickling my hungry eyes

ah,
the glorious, 
soul-filling
Manila Bay sunset

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I continue my walk home
and I sigh,
I sleep at sunrise.






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I have a big feeling I will be writing a different version of this,
I was walking on that street, wishing I was watching the sunset 
near Manila Bay
but yup, this was something that I wrote when I couldn't sleep 
so wasn't able to fully grasp what I wanted to be conveyed,
it lacks something, I don't know, just Something.

Thank you for passing by.

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Lucilla Carrillo July 29, 2014 at 9:25 AM You have painted a beautiful picture of the Manila Bay Sunset. It must be beautiful to watch. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla

Gautami Phookan December 10, 2013 at 1:45 AM "Walking on the street,stretching out both my arms to catch the breeze looking silly, but I don't mind... 'silly' could very well be my middle name..." I love this image of you. Be the girl you are/ You are glorious.. The images are so brilliant throughout, I'd want to keep them close to my heart. Love to you, my darling girl!!!

Poet Destroyer A September 5, 2013 at 3:33 PM Hi Nikko, i'm much calm right now...LOL,,, have you heard from David W.. :-( miss him... ps..thank you for walking me through the sunset on your avatar... it's beautiful...xox~ Linda

Andrea Dietrich July 30, 2013 at 12:48 AM still loving this one and its imagery!!! And yes, you are so right about the first version of my free verse poem. Put up a new poem, pretty please?

Karen Anglesey June 19, 2013 at 8:29 AM Pretty awesome poetry written because you couldn't sleep. Beautiful imagery with such originality. :)

Sara Kendrick June 17, 2013 at 3:10 PM Sunsets and sunrises are each unique and beautiful..Enjoyed reading your descriptive work.Thanks for your visit to my work..Your review was uplifting.Sara

Nette Onclaud June 12, 2013 at 1:04 PM like you, i'm still enthralled by our own sunset.. kahit umuulan, i watch it when am nearby... and your lines give much glory to one of the world;s most beautiful sunsets.. yun lang, so many new buildings around it... purrfetct, nikks!..:) huggs

Wilma Neels June 11, 2013 at 12:31 PM This is a beauty Missy, love how you took me with you on this journey even if you wrote it when you couldn't sleep ;) *mwahugs*

Harry Horsman June 11, 2013 at 10:35 AM Hey nikko, this is so good, just love the tropical feeling of your poetry, you inject such inspiration,,

Kate Wilderson June 10, 2013 at 5:49 AM Maganda ang iyong tula! Beautiful poem! Keep writing!

Kate Wilderson June 10, 2013 at 5:48 AM Maganda ang iyong tula! Beautiful poem! Keep writing!

Kate Wilderson June 10, 2013 at 5:47 AM Maganda ang iyong tula! Beautiful poem! Keep writing!

Charmaine Chircop June 8, 2013 at 2:41 PM Hello sweet Nikko..I wish I could watch the sunset in Manilla bay..it must be awesome.Did i ever tell you i had a physiotherapist when I had my slip.disc from Manilla? She s married to a maltese doctors.She used to describe the besutiful islands there are.If you ever come to Malta i will invite you and her together at our place.She s a sweet lady just like you. Lovely poem..Sometimes before sleeping your muse tickle your senses to paint with.words of beauty..awesome Charmaine Chircop June 8, 2013 at 2:42 PM doctor i meant hehe

Painted Hunter May 31, 2013 at 1:24 PM Howdy Nikko...I like this the way it is...it feels like you...not that i know what you feel like...hahaha. I'd love to see a Manila Bay sunset. Its funny how different sunsets can look in different parts of the world.

Andrea Dietrich May 30, 2013 at 3:36 PM oh, now I see why you ended it the way you did, because it was not a usual day for you! You were not able to sleep!!! I don't think it needs much revision because the middle part where you are describing it as yolk, etc. is simply outstanding. I think you should make it known to us that you are having trouble sleeping. You could do that in the beginning, and then the last line when we come to the ending, would completely make sense. Luv, Andrea

Matthew Anish May 29, 2013 at 10:09 PM Perhaps the poem needs revising but I think you have a potential "gem" here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 30, 2013 at 9:48 AM Thank you, Matthew-- yes, I am leaning towards revising this-- there is something that I still want to capture, grasp? and haven't quite got it yet....

Anne-Lise Andresen May 29, 2013 at 4:03 AM - Beautiful poem ! - Love the sunset! - Have a nice day. - (Feel free to read some of my poems) - oxox / / Anne-Lise :) Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 30, 2013 at 9:47 AM I love sunsets too... enjoy your day as well Anne Lise and will pass by your poems. Thank you...

Nato Calubiran May 28, 2013 at 8:20 PM and I thought this account is inactive. welcome back ate/kuya? Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 30, 2013 at 9:40 AM medyo kalerky ka naman eh o_O -- "binibini" na nga, tapos P.ink pa. Hmmm sige pwede na rin na naniguro ka, given na baka pwedeng mala BB Gandang Hari ang peg ko... haha.

Carrie Richards May 28, 2013 at 6:43 PM And I'm glad you posted it "as is"....I loved it "as is".........and when you wake up, you will see others do too !!! :) So glad to see you writing again!!!! Hugs! Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 30, 2013 at 9:43 AM Thank you for being so sweet, Carrie. I am inclined to edit this though, even just the formatting. Hugs right back to you!

Kash Poet May 28, 2013 at 4:42 PM Previously I used to post my poems using UC Browser from my Cell phone.But since the SUBMIT YOUR POEM page was modified ,I am unable to post my poems through that browser. Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 30, 2013 at 9:42 AM thanks for the ehads up, Kash.... yup, I was using my phone and opera....will go to your poem...

Kash Poet May 28, 2013 at 4:40 PM Beautiful poem here Nikko.I love this.Same thing happened with me(regarding formatting) when I posted my poem 'Sleepless nights' from my cell phone using Opera mini browser.Go and read the comments below that poem.