Sunset

Long shadows calm the ripples, sooth the edge As sunrise bows its head, completes its pledge In orange flash of daylight’s passing spark Full blush for lover’s need of passion’s dark. . Bullfrogs will croak and dragonflies alight As you reframe the embers of the night We will return again as moment’s must For memories are but the lies we trust.

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Terry Miller

Date: 9/27/2023 7:44:00 AM

A very beautiful poem; congratulations

Brian Sambourne

Date: 9/26/2023 9:42:00 AM

A truly exceptional poem, John. The personification of sunset with a bowed head is top notch. As noted, your concluding line rings truth like a loud school Bell. Congratulations!

Christina Bowring

Date: 9/13/2023 1:49:00 PM

Such a beautiful poem John. So well written. ‘As you reframe the elders of the night,’ glorious! The last line makes such an impact as well. So enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/11/2023 9:31:00 AM

I totally agree with Andrea, my friend. This one has golden verses that sing to the reader's heart, mind and soul. A gem and a new fav in my book. God bless you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/10/2023 10:24:00 AM

Love this, the poignant message at the end and the lovely imagery throughout

Di11y Da11y

Date: 9/9/2023 11:25:00 PM

This one comes alive on proper reading... I mean I hadn't expected you to write a description of a sunset without deeper meaning but this is exquisitely layered. I'd touched on this recently with regards to smiles in photographs but the same memory can transform in multiple ways depending perspective at the moment of recall - very insightful John and well written (obviously)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/9/2023 8:08:00 PM

Whoa! That last line packs a punch -- more powerful than Xi's hypersonic weapon. Awesome write, John. Kudos, Gershon