Sun's Betrayal

Whored the moon

   'neath ravaged warm tides,

whence snowflakes caught fire

  channeling sea's frothy surrender

              in a vast edgy drink on

                    the brink of a vengeful rush,

  whilst frigid oceans deviated mid murky

        depths of aimless asylum harbors,

whorling faster to catch up with breaks of dawn

           blistering under betrayal of the sun

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 11/3/2016 5:25:00 PM
Such a beautifully penned poem, Paloma. Your poetic imagination was in overdrive w/this masterpiece. You write poems like the great ones of yesterday's lore. Elegant and expressive as all outdoors. Touche. Love and joy and more love to you. RW
Login to Reply
Date: 11/2/2016 5:56:00 AM
How I missed this one I don't know, I must've been in the dark or something. Betrayed by the sun, nothing but clouds and gloomy skies are looming when what you need is a bright beautiful day. Damn sun...you can't trust it. This was sad and lonely but beautifully written Paloma.
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 11/2/2016 6:05:00 AM
No worries Chris, this site can be somewhat confusing. I'm sure I've missed a few myself. Many thanks!
Date: 10/29/2016 7:44:00 AM
This has left me speechless, Paloma, such strong images. Way to go! Worth multiple reads.
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 10/29/2016 4:32:00 PM
Now you've left me speechless! Very much appreciated.
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter