NOTE: Note: derivation of eclipse => back formation from Old English eclypsis, from Latin eclipsis, from Greek ekleipsis a forsaking, from ekleipein to abandon.
Hence JC etc.
Humble moon hid sun from view; earthlings forsaken shaken. Saw eclipse at dusk, when sun set, then rose at night. Saw eclipse at dawn when sun rose, twice in morn. Sun forlorn, occulted.
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