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Sun Has Gone Down

The Sun has gone down The light engulfed by dark could not warm me The last hand wanting stayed lingered in the air I stayed sitting lonely Watching the first wave goodbye that is when my heart decided: Decisions shouldn't own me I stayed there transparent and let the blackness shade me Sitting on a revisited shoulder there new life contemplates me washing eyes in night air The Moon shall serenade leads but will I follow is the answer I am stuck in hold me Shallow and full of concentrated sighs in the mist of night my head could only sees The Sun has gone down and my heart still only bleeds

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Ashley Plotczyk

Date: 5/31/2011 10:12:00 AM

"I stayed there transparent and let the blackness shade me"...very effective in this poem. Nicely done portraying the image of the sun fadding slowly. :)

Danielle Horan

Date: 3/25/2011 7:50:00 PM

love this poem......continue to write

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/15/2011 10:30:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your poetry this today Jessica. Have a wonderful week filled with good health, love, and lots of inspiration. Love, Carol

Poet Tacito

Date: 3/15/2011 5:21:00 AM

Massive emotion expressed here. The flow on this was quite unique. Well done!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/15/2011 4:58:00 AM

Intense and dramatic lines u have creatively penned Jessica.. stunning imagery of the Sun and feelings interspersed throughout this piece.. so nice to hear from u and can relate to getting caught up here .. life is so very full of so many things.. Soup can grab all one's attention but in a positive way.. we all have to have balance..haha..hard to do .. hope u keep in touch my friend..

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 3/15/2011 1:36:00 AM

I like the poem, the words are nice. The shape sux LoL. Seriously, your stuff is good. The first one I read by you I hated...But the rest have been real chiLL. Not trying to be rude...I think it's cool when that kinda junk happens.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/14/2011 3:29:00 PM

Jessica, I enjoyed this. Did you get the shape you wanted to appear doing it like this?