Jessica Arteaga Poet Shape

Sun Has Gone Down

The Sun
             has gone down
                                     The light
                                                   engulfed by dark
                                                                            could not warm me
                                          The last hand wanting
  stayed lingered in the air
I
 stayed sitting lonely
                                Watching the first wave goodbye
                                                                              that is
when my heart decided:
                                         Decisions shouldn't own me
I stayed there transparent
                                        and let the blackness shade me
                                                                                       
Sitting on a revisited shoulder
                                       there new life contemplates me
washing eyes in night air
                                       The Moon shall serenade leads
                                   but
will I follow is the answer
                                    I am stuck in hold me
Shallow and full of concentrated sighs
                                              in the mist of night
            my head could only sees
The Sun
           has gone down
                                and my heart still only bleeds

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Ashley Plotczyk May 31, 2011 at 10:12 AM "I stayed there transparent and let the blackness shade me"...very effective in this poem. Nicely done portraying the image of the sun fadding slowly. :)

Danielle Horan March 25, 2011 at 7:50 PM love this poem......continue to write

Carol Sunshine Brown March 15, 2011 at 10:30 AM I enjoyed reading your poetry this today Jessica. Have a wonderful week filled with good health, love, and lots of inspiration. Love, Carol

Poet Tacito March 15, 2011 at 5:21 AM Massive emotion expressed here. The flow on this was quite unique. Well done!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 15, 2011 at 4:58 AM Intense and dramatic lines u have creatively penned Jessica.. stunning imagery of the Sun and feelings interspersed throughout this piece.. so nice to hear from u and can relate to getting caught up here .. life is so very full of so many things.. Soup can grab all one's attention but in a positive way.. we all have to have balance..haha..hard to do .. hope u keep in touch my friend..

Jslambert Mister Roboto March 15, 2011 at 1:36 AM I like the poem, the words are nice. The shape sux LoL. Seriously, your stuff is good. The first one I read by you I hated...But the rest have been real chiLL. Not trying to be rude...I think it's cool when that kinda junk happens.

Andrea Dietrich March 14, 2011 at 3:29 PM Jessica, I enjoyed this. Did you get the shape you wanted to appear doing it like this?