Rama Balasubramanian Poet Rhyme

Sun and Sand Minichu

"Sun is nothing without sand. Have no ego, you are no one and nowhere without assistance"
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Hottest of all things, sun
Rays hit sand, are reflected, we feel extreme heat
Heat no fun

Without the ground
without sand, there will be no heat
around

Ground sand
Amazing feat
Grand

Hottest of all things, sun
Rays hit sand, are reflected, we feel extreme heat
Grand

Date: 1/18/2021
Syllable count checked at poetry soup syllable counter
Winner 14th position

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Sara Kendrick February 5, 2021 at 2:12 PM Creative way to go for the contest. Congrats on your winner. Sara

Paula Goldsmith February 3, 2021 at 12:35 PM Congratulations on your win. The sand can get so very hot from the sun, just like your hot write. Cool off in the water and enjoy your win with blessings................. Rama Balasubramanian February 3, 2021 at 10:31 PM Thanks. Cool water refreshing in hot sand. Sharp contrast you spoke about. True. God bless! Take care! Enjoy your day friend

Linda Alice Fowler February 3, 2021 at 7:16 AM We should appreciate the simple things and their relationships to life more. Congratulations on the win Rama! Linda Rama Balasubramanian February 3, 2021 at 10:23 AM Thanks Linda. You understood very well what I wanted to convey. God bless. Take care Rama

Mohan Chutani February 3, 2021 at 3:37 AM Rama, thanx for participating in my contest and describing the interplay of sun, sand and heat through your Minichu. Congrats for your placement. Best. Mohan Rama Balasubramanian February 3, 2021 at 3:56 AM Thanks for the placement. I love the challenge posed by this form. Enjoyed writing. Wanted to write something different than the normal beach scene. Great form you have created. God bless! Enjoy your evening. Take care Rama

Gershon Wolf January 19, 2021 at 3:32 PM I LIKE this poem, Rama! You really conveyed the hot sun-hot beach-hot sand feeling. Warmed my feet up here in cold, snowy Chicago! :) ... Superb entry for the contest, methinks. Sun and Sand, Gershon Rama Balasubramanian January 20, 2021 at 7:22 AM Thanks Gerson. Actually I wanted to convey the message on top. Guess couldn't do that. Doesn't matter. If I made you feel hot, I am more than happy. Thanks for uplifting comments. Enjoy your day friend. Take care Rama

Judy Ball January 19, 2021 at 2:35 PM This reminds me of walking along the beach in the hot sand and wishing I had been smart enough to wear sandals. Well done. God Bless, JB Rama Balasubramanian January 20, 2021 at 7:20 AM Thanks for uplifting comments. God bless. Take care Rama

Jan Allison January 18, 2021 at 11:39 AM beautifully penned Rama good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Rama Balasubramanian January 19, 2021 at 4:03 AM Thanks Anne. From Geography chapter of son. Wanted to be different. Your entry superb. Take care. Enjoy your day friend