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Summer Stroll

golden grains of sand
gentle waves caress our toes
dreams walk on ... kiss you!

Jan Allison
20th November 2014
Thanks to Demetrios for his assistance with the final line

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Robert Warlov Date: 9/6/2023 1:53:00 PM Just like romance to ruin a perfect scene. Pregnant with ethereal possibilities. Login to Reply

Michael Newman Date: 11/25/2014 6:53:00 AM Romance in three lines AAAAAAhh... Miken Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/25/2014 11:50:00 AM Thanks so much Miken :-) Hugs jan xxxxx

Donna Jones Date: 11/21/2014 12:48:00 PM Your words make me want to jump right in that picture...very nice Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/21/2014 12:52:00 PM Thank you so much Donna - guess we could all do with some sunshine at the moment and the hope of warmer weather:-) hugs Jan xx

James Fraser Date: 11/21/2014 12:25:00 PM There's something wonderful walking on warm sands, especially with a loved one. Now I know where the sand is, next > This Haiku simply warms the soul, James :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/21/2014 12:27:00 PM Thank you so much James I had a much simpler final line and Demetrios came up with this gem which is simply perfect:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick Date: 11/20/2014 5:09:00 PM Thanks for the visit to my page..I am sorry to be so long in responding back..Life has been a little different lately..Sara..Great collaborative work..I enjoyed reading it and enjoyed the picture.. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 5:10:00 PM thanks so much Sara Demetrios will be delighted at the positive feedback since i amended the original poem:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/20/2014 9:03:00 AM this is very romantic and the imagery is beautiful, Jan. Soupmail Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 12:01:00 PM Thanks so much Andrea - I must read that link sometime!! hugs Jan x

Paul Callus Date: 11/20/2014 8:49:00 AM Lovely and romantic haiku, Jan. I love it! #7 hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 12:01:00 PM Thanks so much Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 11/20/2014 8:27:00 AM Ah, the sweet memories of summer. Love your Haiku Jan. XOXO Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 12:00:00 PM Thanks as ever for your lovely comments:-) hugs Jan x

David Meade Date: 11/20/2014 7:57:00 AM Of course I love the haiku . . . the feel and smell of the sand and water . . . the endless possibilities of dreams . . . nicely done -- a tag team!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 12:00:00 PM Thanks David I do appreciate your comments:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dorian Petersen Potter Date: 11/20/2014 7:40:00 AM Wonderful haiku Jan! Superb romantic ! Perfect image for it! :) Love and hugs! xxxx D. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 11:59:00 AM Thanks Dorian - I said I wouldn't use images but I can see they are beneficial for setting a mood:-) hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 11/20/2014 6:38:00 AM Beautiful haiku. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 11:58:00 AM Thanks so much Maurice:-) Hugs jan x

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 11/20/2014 5:22:00 AM My dearest, Jan, your poetic talent is surpassed only by your magnanimity! You deserve the credit for this superb Haiku! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/20/2014 5:24:00 AM Your amendment to the final line makes the poem far more romantic - thank you so much:-) Hugs Jan xx