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golden grains of sand
gentle waves caress our toes
dreams walk on ... kiss you!

Jan Allison
20th November 2014
Thanks to Demetrios for his assistance with the final line

beachhaiku

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Robert Warlov

September 6, 2023 at 1:53 PM

Just like romance to ruin a perfect scene. Pregnant with ethereal possibilities.

Michael Newman

November 25, 2014 at 6:53 AM

Romance in three lines AAAAAAhh... Miken

Jan Allison

November 25, 2014 at 11:50 AM

Thanks so much Miken :-) Hugs jan xxxxx

Donna Jones

November 21, 2014 at 12:48 PM

Your words make me want to jump right in that picture...very nice

Jan Allison

November 21, 2014 at 12:52 PM

Thank you so much Donna - guess we could all do with some sunshine at the moment and the hope of warmer weather:-) hugs Jan xx

James Fraser

November 21, 2014 at 12:25 PM

There's something wonderful walking on warm sands, especially with a loved one. Now I know where the sand is, next > This Haiku simply warms the soul, James :)

Jan Allison

November 21, 2014 at 12:27 PM

Thank you so much James I had a much simpler final line and Demetrios came up with this gem which is simply perfect:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

November 20, 2014 at 5:09 PM

Thanks for the visit to my page..I am sorry to be so long in responding back..Life has been a little different lately..Sara..Great collaborative work..I enjoyed reading it and enjoyed the picture..

Jan Allison

November 20, 2014 at 5:10 PM

thanks so much Sara Demetrios will be delighted at the positive feedback since i amended the original poem:-) Hugs jan xx