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relishing an afternoon nap drowsy sunflowers ---------------------- Short Form Contest by Andrea Dietrich 17th May 2016 Placed 1st

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Date: 3/29/2017 7:00:00 PM
...beautiful words... heavenly imagery. Sublime writing Paul :-) blessings xx
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Paul Callus
Date: 3/30/2017 9:08:00 AM
It's a pleasure reading your awesome comments, Lynn...thank you:) Regards // paul
Date: 11/19/2016 4:24:00 PM
This senryu is sooo cool and clever, Paul. I like reading the other talented poets/poetesses do the short forms like senryu. I appreciate the skill it takes to write short form. Putting a novel inside a pamphlet requires real parsing skill. Very nicely done. Much love to you.
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Date: 11/24/2016 11:34:00 AM
Thank you for the insightful comments, Freddie. These short Japanese forms are not as easy as they look; I'm still getting to grips with them. Regards // paul
Date: 9/20/2016 12:38:00 AM
Interesting form.. I definitely have to read up on these short forms... Thanks for the introduction to these. You are very talented. Jenni
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Date: 9/20/2016 10:23:00 AM
You are too kind, Jenni:) Thank you! Senryu and haiku are closely related. I'm sure you'll find both forms interesting. Regards // paul
Date: 5/23/2016 4:04:00 PM
Easy to see why this won 1st place. Congrats are in order, my friend. Have you ever considered writing a short book of short form poetry?
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Date: 5/24/2016 4:52:00 AM
Thank you Timothy. Up to a year ago I hardly ever gave these short forms much importance; it's only in recent months that I realized how much there is to learn about them. A book would not be a bad idea...! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 5/22/2016 4:29:00 AM
congrats on your 1st place win, i can see why andrea placed this first, it conjures such a lovely snapshot image...funnily enough, the one i'm writing for her current contest is about sunflowers, but i'm too wordy for these very brief forms, i view them mainly as writing exercises
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Date: 5/22/2016 9:02:00 AM
Hi Charlotte! Thank you for a pleasant visit. Let me guess...you're writing a quatrain, tanka or triolet...I will go and check it out later on. I like short forms, but it has only been in these last months that I started learning more about haiku/senryu. ~ All the best....paul
Date: 5/21/2016 3:16:00 PM
Excellent Senryu, Paul! Congratulations on your First Place win! Sandra
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:57:00 AM
Thank you Sandra! It was lovely to see you standing beside me on the podium:) ~ Regards // paul
Date: 5/21/2016 3:15:00 PM
i'm not surprised this is a topper, paul.. sweet congrats!..huggs
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:55:00 AM
You're always nice to me dear Nette:) Thank you:) Hugs // paul
Date: 5/21/2016 3:09:00 PM
Fabulous Paul!!! many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:54:00 AM
That 'fabulous' sounds very lovely, Jan:) Thank you. I will back to you later on after catching up on late replies. hugs // paul
Date: 5/21/2016 1:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning work, Paul. Great work! David
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:51:00 AM
You did very well yourself David! Thank you. ~ Regards // paul
Date: 5/21/2016 11:59:00 AM
- Congratulations on your Summer poems, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:49:00 AM
Thank you Anne Lise:) Have a lovely day:) hugs // paul
Date: 5/21/2016 5:27:00 AM
A wonderful senryu my dear friend, Paul. Congratulations on your win! Hugs and cheers! love and hugs, Galeo
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:48:00 AM
Lovely of you to stop by, Leonora:) and thank you for liking plus the congrats. Hope you had a nice weekend. Love & Hugs // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 10:17:00 PM
Congratulations Paul on your top win!
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:08:00 AM
Thank you Meenakshi:) Have a nice day! Regards // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 10:04:00 PM
Beautiful Paul. Very nice win!
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Date: 5/22/2016 7:52:00 AM
Thank you Lukas; enjoyed your winning work, too. // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 9:32:00 PM
Wow congrats on your TOP win!
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Date: 5/22/2016 8:03:00 AM
Pleased to have you visiting again, Moon:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 8:46:00 PM
You gave us that aha moment Paul! Big congrats on your first place win! #7 ; )
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Date: 5/21/2016 10:02:00 AM
Thank you, Connie. Judging a contest is not easy; there were many beautiful entries; guess luck was on my side. Have a lovely weekend. // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 7:54:00 PM
Congrats on your #1 win Paul
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Date: 5/21/2016 9:59:00 AM
You too placed high up the list, Joseph:) Thank you! Regards // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 7:46:00 PM
Love this!
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Date: 5/21/2016 9:57:00 AM
Glad to make your acquaintance, Kim:) Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 7:35:00 PM
Great work Paul, congratulations...
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Date: 5/21/2016 9:55:00 AM
Thank you Charlie; was pleased to see you on the winners' list:) All the best. // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 7:32:00 PM
You are on fire Paul...congrats!
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Date: 5/21/2016 9:54:00 AM
Thank you for the compliment, David. You and some others could easily have placed first; there were many good entries. Regards // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 7:14:00 PM
oh my goodness, I can't believe I chose you again. You must know my mind to know how to keep producing my fave senryu. Come on and give others a chance. hahaha. This ROCKS. Congrats.
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Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 7:05:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea!! The cheque/check is in the post:) I'm so pleased that you picked out my senryu for no1 placing. ~ Regards // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 7:14:00 PM
the drowsy sunflower REALLY did it for me!
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Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 6:57:00 AM
the secret is....I write most of my poems when I'm drowsy and half asleep:) // paul
Date: 5/20/2016 12:52:00 AM
Dear Paul Hello my friend I wanted to let you know I'm back on my feet. Thank you so much for all your great comments of comfort and caring words of encouragement my dear fellow. I had a few set backs health wise. But you can't hold this old gal down OMG. I will bet this and by the way love this work it is very inspiring, love the imagery within it. I'll be trying to be on the air more often just had to work on the health for a few extra days, take care and hope you are well also, cheri
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Date: 5/20/2016 4:52:00 AM
Dear Cherl, it's lovely to see you back:) I understand that after surgery the body takes time to recuperate, but I am sure that soon you will have your strength back. In the meantime there's nothing wrong with taking it easy:) After this experience I suggest a title for your next poem: "Heart to Heart". ~ All the best....paul
Date: 5/19/2016 2:28:00 PM
Beautiful analogy my lovely friend. A sweet 7. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/20/2016 4:45:00 AM
Thank you BL; always a pleasure to read your comments. Regards // paul
Date: 5/19/2016 5:00:00 AM
How I love it! Mediterranean people know how to enjoy one of those naps dear, Paul! Harmonious! Good luck!
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Date: 5/19/2016 8:09:00 AM
When I was younger I was not that interested in afternoon naps, but now I have taken a liking to them. I read the paper, rest my eyes, and then back to business:) Enjoyed your pleasant visit....thank you. // paul
Date: 5/19/2016 4:34:00 AM
lovely power nap in summer, best.
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Paul Callus
Date: 5/19/2016 8:04:00 AM
Hi Mohan! In summer, by noon it is usually too hot, and one tends to feel void of strength; an hour's sleep works wonders:) Regards // paul
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