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Summer Siesta

relishing

       an afternoon nap

      drowsy sunflowers


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     Short Form Contest
      by Andrea Dietrich
        17th May 2016
            Placed 1st

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Lynn Marie

Date: 3/29/2017 7:00:00 PM

...beautiful words... heavenly imagery. Sublime writing Paul :-) blessings xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/30/2017 9:08:00 AM

It's a pleasure reading your awesome comments, Lynn...thank you:) Regards // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/19/2016 4:24:00 PM

This senryu is sooo cool and clever, Paul. I like reading the other talented poets/poetesses do the short forms like senryu. I appreciate the skill it takes to write short form. Putting a novel inside a pamphlet requires real parsing skill. Very nicely done. Much love to you.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2016 11:34:00 AM

Thank you for the insightful comments, Freddie. These short Japanese forms are not as easy as they look; I'm still getting to grips with them. Regards // paul

Jenni Kalicharan

Date: 9/20/2016 12:38:00 AM

Interesting form.. I definitely have to read up on these short forms... Thanks for the introduction to these. You are very talented. Jenni

Paul Callus
Date: 9/20/2016 10:23:00 AM

You are too kind, Jenni:) Thank you! Senryu and haiku are closely related. I'm sure you'll find both forms interesting. Regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/23/2016 4:04:00 PM

Easy to see why this won 1st place. Congrats are in order, my friend. Have you ever considered writing a short book of short form poetry?

Paul Callus
Date: 5/24/2016 4:52:00 AM

Thank you Timothy. Up to a year ago I hardly ever gave these short forms much importance; it's only in recent months that I realized how much there is to learn about them. A book would not be a bad idea...! ~ Regards // paul

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 5/22/2016 4:29:00 AM

congrats on your 1st place win, i can see why andrea placed this first, it conjures such a lovely snapshot image...funnily enough, the one i'm writing for her current contest is about sunflowers, but i'm too wordy for these very brief forms, i view them mainly as writing exercises

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 9:02:00 AM

Hi Charlotte! Thank you for a pleasant visit. Let me guess...you're writing a quatrain, tanka or triolet...I will go and check it out later on. I like short forms, but it has only been in these last months that I started learning more about haiku/senryu. ~ All the best....paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/21/2016 3:16:00 PM

Excellent Senryu, Paul! Congratulations on your First Place win! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:57:00 AM

Thank you Sandra! It was lovely to see you standing beside me on the podium:) ~ Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/21/2016 3:15:00 PM

i'm not surprised this is a topper, paul.. sweet congrats!..huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:55:00 AM

You're always nice to me dear Nette:) Thank you:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 5/21/2016 3:09:00 PM

Fabulous Paul!!! many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:54:00 AM

That 'fabulous' sounds very lovely, Jan:) Thank you. I will back to you later on after catching up on late replies. hugs // paul

David De La Croes

Date: 5/21/2016 1:24:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning work, Paul. Great work! David

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:51:00 AM

You did very well yourself David! Thank you. ~ Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/21/2016 11:59:00 AM

- Congratulations on your Summer poems, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:49:00 AM

Thank you Anne Lise:) Have a lovely day:) hugs // paul

Len Gasun

Date: 5/21/2016 5:27:00 AM

A wonderful senryu my dear friend, Paul. Congratulations on your win! Hugs and cheers! love and hugs, Galeo

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:48:00 AM

Lovely of you to stop by, Leonora:) and thank you for liking plus the congrats. Hope you had a nice weekend. Love & Hugs // paul

Meenakshi Raina

Date: 5/20/2016 10:17:00 PM

Congratulations Paul on your top win!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:08:00 AM

Thank you Meenakshi:) Have a nice day! Regards // paul

Lukas Ficklin

Date: 5/20/2016 10:04:00 PM

Beautiful Paul. Very nice win!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 7:52:00 AM

Thank you Lukas; enjoyed your winning work, too. // paul

Moon Flower

Date: 5/20/2016 9:32:00 PM

Wow congrats on your TOP win!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/22/2016 8:03:00 AM

Pleased to have you visiting again, Moon:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/20/2016 8:46:00 PM

You gave us that aha moment Paul! Big congrats on your first place win! #7 ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 10:02:00 AM

Thank you, Connie. Judging a contest is not easy; there were many beautiful entries; guess luck was on my side. Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Joseph May

Date: 5/20/2016 7:54:00 PM

Congrats on your #1 win Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 9:59:00 AM

You too placed high up the list, Joseph:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/20/2016 7:46:00 PM

Love this!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 9:57:00 AM

Glad to make your acquaintance, Kim:) Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Charlie Smith

Date: 5/20/2016 7:35:00 PM

Great work Paul, congratulations...

Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 9:55:00 AM

Thank you Charlie; was pleased to see you on the winners' list:) All the best. // paul

David Mohn

Date: 5/20/2016 7:32:00 PM

You are on fire Paul...congrats!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 9:54:00 AM

Thank you for the compliment, David. You and some others could easily have placed first; there were many good entries. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/20/2016 7:14:00 PM

the drowsy sunflower REALLY did it for me!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 6:57:00 AM

the secret is....I write most of my poems when I'm drowsy and half asleep:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/20/2016 7:14:00 PM

oh my goodness, I can't believe I chose you again. You must know my mind to know how to keep producing my fave senryu. Come on and give others a chance. hahaha. This ROCKS. Congrats.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/21/2016 7:05:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea!! The cheque/check is in the post:) I'm so pleased that you picked out my senryu for no1 placing. ~ Regards // paul

Cherl Dunn

Date: 5/20/2016 12:52:00 AM

Dear Paul Hello my friend I wanted to let you know I'm back on my feet. Thank you so much for all your great comments of comfort and caring words of encouragement my dear fellow. I had a few set backs health wise. But you can't hold this old gal down OMG. I will bet this and by the way love this work it is very inspiring, love the imagery within it. I'll be trying to be on the air more often just had to work on the health for a few extra days, take care and hope you are well also, cheri

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2016 4:52:00 AM

Dear Cherl, it's lovely to see you back:) I understand that after surgery the body takes time to recuperate, but I am sure that soon you will have your strength back. In the meantime there's nothing wrong with taking it easy:) After this experience I suggest a title for your next poem: "Heart to Heart". ~ All the best....paul

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/19/2016 2:28:00 PM

Beautiful analogy my lovely friend. A sweet 7. Loved always, bl

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2016 4:45:00 AM

Thank you BL; always a pleasure to read your comments. Regards // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/19/2016 5:00:00 AM

How I love it! Mediterranean people know how to enjoy one of those naps dear, Paul! Harmonious! Good luck!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/19/2016 8:09:00 AM

When I was younger I was not that interested in afternoon naps, but now I have taken a liking to them. I read the paper, rest my eyes, and then back to business:) Enjoyed your pleasant visit....thank you. // paul