Sneha Rv Poet Triolet

Summer Horizon

The crows rise up into the summer sky
Horizon's orange fills with dots of black          
The murder glides through air, alert and spry,
The crows rise up into the summer sky.              
They dip their wings in water, then they cry -        
The 'caws' resound beyond the sea and back
The crows rise up into the summer sky,         
Horizon's orange fills with dots of black.     


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Iambic Pentameter 
My first Triolet
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Big thanks to Paul Callus and Craig Cornish for helping me improve the form, meter and poem!

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Line Gauthier December 21, 2017 at 5:45 PM Congrats on your win, Sneha.

Vijay Pandit December 17, 2017 at 9:45 PM Congrats Sneha on your win!4

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 17, 2017 at 9:38 PM Congratulations! Love this :) xomo!

Kim Rodrigues December 17, 2017 at 8:30 PM Oh so lovely! Crows sure do lend their hand at some fine poetry! Congrats!

Kim Merryman June 13, 2015 at 8:43 PM Great imagery, Sneha! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Sandra Haight June 13, 2015 at 8:27 PM Hi Sneha, stopping back to congratulate you on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra

Skat A June 13, 2015 at 6:26 PM Sneha, Congratulations on your LOVELY SUMMER TRIOLET ----- SKAT :-)

Paul Callus June 13, 2015 at 3:29 PM Congratulations Sneha!! The pupil flies high above the teacher:))) Well done! // paul

Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 5:36 AM Dropping back with my congrats Sneha:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich June 13, 2015 at 12:52 AM You did very well with the form for your first time. I'm glad you got these two outstanding poets to help you with the meter, Sneha. If you had used periods in place of some of those commas, I would have given this a higher placement because this was just beautiful with its imagery! Congrats! Sneha Rv June 13, 2015 at 1:55 AM Thank you SO much for my placement, dear Andrea!! SO happy you liked it!! I loved your contest!! I will improve it.. :D :D Thank you so much again!!! :D :D :D

Ravindra K Kapoor June 8, 2015 at 1:24 AM You have sketched a beautiful picture Sneha. My good wishes for your contest entry. Love and best wishes always...Ravindra K Kapoor Sneha Rv June 8, 2015 at 6:26 AM Thank you so much for your lovely comment!! :D :D

Constance La France June 1, 2015 at 1:55 PM Sneha, this is beautiful for the contest and thanks for visiting my poem, June . . . Sneha Rv June 8, 2015 at 6:24 AM Thanks a lot!! :D :D

Ken Jordan May 30, 2015 at 1:47 PM Seven is a great number for this piece, I enjoyed this read. Thank you for sharing. Ken Sneha Rv May 30, 2015 at 1:59 PM Thank you!!

Sandra Haight May 29, 2015 at 3:23 PM Such a great Triolet, Sneha! I believe yours will be on the winner's list! Love it! Hugs, Sandra Sneha Rv May 30, 2015 at 2:01 PM Thank you so much, dear Sandra!! Very happy you liked it!! :D :D

Nette Onclaud May 27, 2015 at 11:49 AM how detailed and powerful are your word choices and images, sneva... i am taken by this fine read.. huggs Sneha Rv May 27, 2015 at 12:08 PM Hello, dear Nette!! Thank you so much!! So happy you liked it!! .. :D :D

Paul Callus May 27, 2015 at 7:24 AM This is a lovely Triolet, Sneha! Both the words and the visual match well together. Considering your age, you keep on impressing me:) // paul Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 5:37 AM She is a charming person and a wonderful talent Paul:-) Hugs jan xx Sneha Rv May 27, 2015 at 9:30 AM Thank you so much!! SO happy you liked it!! :D :D

Jan Allison May 27, 2015 at 7:05 AM beautifully descriptive Sneha - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx Sneha Rv May 27, 2015 at 9:31 AM Thanks a lot, dear Jan!! :D :D