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Summer Beach

the swash of cold waves, ankle-deep, twines burning sand - infinite surging oil of coconut on darkening flesh, the sun - surf and splash sizzle

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/27/2023 4:53:00 PM

Kim, these haikus so emphasize the "splash," "sizzle," smell of coconut oil and the cooling waves! Well done! Congratulations on your winning placement! Blessings!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/27/2023 7:04:00 PM

Thank you, Sam!

Chantelle Cooke

Date: 7/15/2023 4:43:00 PM

Love this!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2023 5:43:00 AM

Thank you, Chantelle!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/14/2023 4:07:00 PM

wow, I found your set to be outstanding, Kim!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/14/2023 5:31:00 PM

Thank you! Though always happy to place, I was surprised to end up toward the end of placements. Still, I am so happy to get so many nice comments! I’ll take that. xxoo

Kim Merryman

Date: 7/12/2023 6:54:00 PM

Love that last line, Kim :"surf and splash sizzle". Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/13/2023 4:15:00 AM

Thank you, Kim!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/12/2023 11:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A lovely write. Your cold waves sound heavenly. Have a blessed day writing away...................

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/13/2023 4:16:00 AM

Thank you, Paula!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/12/2023 9:59:00 AM

- Kim, congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/13/2023 4:19:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise!

Tania Kitchin

Date: 7/12/2023 5:36:00 AM

Kim, congratulations on your winning placement, enjoyed the beach day imagery!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/13/2023 4:19:00 AM

Thank you, Tania!

Gary Radice

Date: 7/1/2023 9:58:00 AM

I chose to read this from your listing Kim as I've read several beach themed poems today from Soupers and enjoyed them all. Your descriptions are great. I'm often unsure about haikus - probably because I have difficulty writing them myself and not all have left an impression on me - but these two totally hit the mark. How come I can smell that coconut oil and feel the cold waves? :) Cheers - Gary

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/1/2023 12:16:00 PM

I know I try to visualize myself there and of course I know some things about the sea. I so appreciate your feedback, Gary! I don’t always know if I get haikus right but I keep trying! Blessings!

Panagiota Romios

Date: 6/30/2023 10:26:00 AM

Oh, golly! How I remember oil of coconut! Great haiku Panagiota

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/30/2023 1:48:00 PM

Thank you, Pangie!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/29/2023 7:55:00 PM

Wow! I remember those days!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/29/2023 9:23:00 PM

Yes!

Paige Hind

Date: 6/29/2023 11:45:00 AM

Beautiful poetry!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/29/2023 2:58:00 PM

Thank you, Paige!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/29/2023 6:50:00 AM

- I swam in these cold waves last weekend... brrrr ... - Lovely written, Kim :) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/29/2023 2:59:00 PM

Ooh…ahh…bet it was wonderful! Hugs, Anne-Lise!

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/29/2023 5:34:00 AM

Love the vivid imagery and emotion that puts me right there at the beach, Kim! Great haiku pairing! :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/29/2023 6:07:00 AM

Thank you, Laura! :)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/28/2023 10:36:00 PM

How delightful to feel the cool water on your hot feet. Charming sweet Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/29/2023 6:07:00 AM

Thank you, my sweet friend! :)

Valsa George

Date: 6/28/2023 9:13:00 PM

The waves kissing the burning sand.... ! So realistic of summer ! Lovely haiku dear Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/29/2023 6:07:00 AM

Thank you,Valsa! :)

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 6/28/2023 8:48:00 PM

Images of movement, sight and sounds, splendidly evoke beach bliss. :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/29/2023 6:08:00 AM

Thank you, Evelyn! :)

Paul Callus

Date: 6/28/2023 2:16:00 PM

Your summer beach sounds heavenly, Kim, especially for those who, for various reasons, do not have the opportunity to enjoy it. I live on an island, and the beach is never too far away. Of course, the sun's temptation has to be handled with caution. ~ Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2023 3:05:00 PM

Lived on Oahu for a time. It was very nice! Thank you, Paul! :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/28/2023 1:56:00 PM

Reads like a good contender to me for the contest if there is one for this topic. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my pages. Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2023 3:04:00 PM

Thank you, Sara, and likewise thank you for dropping by my page. Blessings!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2023 1:25:00 PM

ahhh, that's what I love about summer. Laying out and getting to enjoy an actual beach!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2023 3:03:00 PM

Would be nice!

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 6/28/2023 1:18:00 PM

Oh this is a fun write! I think I'll go buy some Coppertone and go into the backyard and let my memories drift back to the teenage days! This brought back happy memories Kim, I love the beach! <3

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/28/2023 3:02:00 PM

Thank you, dear BJ!