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Summer Beach

the swash of cold waves,
ankle-deep, twines burning sand -
infinite surging

oil of coconut
on darkening flesh, the sun -
surf and splash sizzle

Copyright © Kim Rodrigues | Year Posted 2023

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July 27, 2023 at 4:53 PM

Kim, these haikus so emphasize the "splash," "sizzle," smell of coconut oil and the cooling waves! Well done! Congratulations on your winning placement! Blessings!

July 27, 2023 at 7:04 PM

Thank you, Sam!

Andrea Dietrich

July 14, 2023 at 4:07 PM

wow, I found your set to be outstanding, Kim!!

July 14, 2023 at 5:31 PM

Thank you! Though always happy to place, I was surprised to end up toward the end of placements. Still, I am so happy to get so many nice comments! I’ll take that. xxoo

July 12, 2023 at 6:54 PM

Love that last line, Kim :"surf and splash sizzle". Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

July 13, 2023 at 4:15 AM

Thank you, Kim!

Paula Goldsmith

July 12, 2023 at 11:58 AM

Congratulations on your win. A lovely write. Your cold waves sound heavenly. Have a blessed day writing away...................

July 13, 2023 at 4:16 AM

Thank you, Paula!

Anne-Lise Andresen

July 12, 2023 at 9:59 AM

- Kim, congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs

July 13, 2023 at 4:19 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise!

July 12, 2023 at 5:36 AM

Kim, congratulations on your winning placement, enjoyed the beach day imagery!

July 13, 2023 at 4:19 AM

Thank you, Tania!

July 1, 2023 at 9:58 AM

I chose to read this from your listing Kim as I've read several beach themed poems today from Soupers and enjoyed them all. Your descriptions are great. I'm often unsure about haikus - probably because I have difficulty writing them myself and not all have left an impression on me - but these two totally hit the mark. How come I can smell that coconut oil and feel the cold waves? :) Cheers - Gary

July 1, 2023 at 12:16 PM

I know I try to visualize myself there and of course I know some things about the sea. I so appreciate your feedback, Gary! I don’t always know if I get haikus right but I keep trying! Blessings!

Panagiota Romios

June 30, 2023 at 10:26 AM

Oh, golly! How I remember oil of coconut! Great haiku Panagiota

June 30, 2023 at 1:48 PM

Thank you, Pangie!

June 29, 2023 at 7:55 PM

Wow! I remember those days!

June 29, 2023 at 9:23 PM

Yes!

June 29, 2023 at 11:45 AM

Beautiful poetry!!

June 29, 2023 at 2:58 PM

Thank you, Paige!

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 29, 2023 at 6:50 AM

- I swam in these cold waves last weekend... brrrr ... - Lovely written, Kim :) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs

June 29, 2023 at 2:59 PM

Ooh…ahh…bet it was wonderful! Hugs, Anne-Lise!

June 29, 2023 at 5:34 AM

Love the vivid imagery and emotion that puts me right there at the beach, Kim! Great haiku pairing! :)

June 29, 2023 at 6:07 AM

Thank you, Laura! :)

Victor Buhagiar

June 28, 2023 at 10:36 PM

How delightful to feel the cool water on your hot feet. Charming sweet Kim.

June 29, 2023 at 6:07 AM

Thank you, my sweet friend! :)

June 28, 2023 at 9:13 PM

The waves kissing the burning sand.... ! So realistic of summer ! Lovely haiku dear Kim.

June 29, 2023 at 6:07 AM

Thank you,Valsa! :)

Evelyn Judy Buehler

June 28, 2023 at 8:48 PM

Images of movement, sight and sounds, splendidly evoke beach bliss. :)

June 29, 2023 at 6:08 AM

Thank you, Evelyn! :)

June 28, 2023 at 2:16 PM

Your summer beach sounds heavenly, Kim, especially for those who, for various reasons, do not have the opportunity to enjoy it. I live on an island, and the beach is never too far away. Of course, the sun's temptation has to be handled with caution. ~ Regards // paul

June 28, 2023 at 3:05 PM

Lived on Oahu for a time. It was very nice! Thank you, Paul! :)

June 28, 2023 at 1:56 PM

Reads like a good contender to me for the contest if there is one for this topic. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my pages. Sara

June 28, 2023 at 3:04 PM

Thank you, Sara, and likewise thank you for dropping by my page. Blessings!

Andrea Dietrich

June 28, 2023 at 1:25 PM

ahhh, that's what I love about summer. Laying out and getting to enjoy an actual beach!

June 28, 2023 at 3:03 PM

Would be nice!

Bj Legros Kelley

June 28, 2023 at 1:18 PM

Oh this is a fun write! I think I'll go buy some Coppertone and go into the backyard and let my memories drift back to the teenage days! This brought back happy memories Kim, I love the beach! <3

June 28, 2023 at 3:02 PM

Thank you, dear BJ!

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