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Sultry Stemware

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Sultry Stemware

He lifts me up, and holds me against the light,
His tender eyes glaringly, stares at my
genteel presence, looking over
at my noble constitution,
I feel his desires
of his hands
as he 
sips
my
e
s
s
e
n
c
e,
as I
am but a
grin on his face,
with eyes for another me.

2019 May 07
*1st Place*
ALL YOURS (JUN 1)
~~Brian Strand: Judged 2021 June 01

Copyright © Hilo Poet | Year Posted 2019

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Sam Kauffman Date: 6/1/2021 12:25:00 PM Cheers William! And congratulations on this wonderfully personified, metaphoric shape poem. Wonderfully, and very skillfully, crafted. A great example of your poetic skills. Congratulations! Aloha! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 6/1/2021 6:45:00 PM You honor me, Sam, for you have welcomed my heart into exceeding gladness. Bear in mind, wherein, the passage of waning time, should this kindness be forgotten by me, know that Heaven will always remember, my friend, Aloha!

Gary Radice Date: 6/1/2021 8:22:00 AM I'll drink to this brilliant work. Cheers - Gary :) Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 6/1/2021 5:01:00 PM I'll drink to that, tho' 2 is my absolute limit ere the Old Fashioned ;) ... thanks, Gary, Aloha!

Suzanne Delaney Date: 6/1/2021 4:58:00 AM Very original concrete poem and love the ‘essence’ in the stem. Congratulations. SuZ Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 6/1/2021 1:13:00 PM I am truly grateful, Suzanne, for your gifted nature my friend, Aloha!

Ralph Sergi Date: 5/18/2019 10:24:00 AM A well constructed poem that becomes climatic when it reaches the stem. My compliments, William! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/18/2019 12:03:00 PM You my gratitudes Ralph, Aloha wk

Susan Ashley Date: 5/17/2019 11:59:00 PM Everything about your poem is exceptional, William. Excellent personification in concrete form, and especially striking, are your last four lines for an intoxicating finale. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/18/2019 4:24:00 AM My extended courtesies for words from a righteous soul, Aloha William

Caren Krutsinger Date: 5/17/2019 7:37:00 PM Concrete personification? And it looks exactly like a goblet? This is a show off poem, and it is fun also! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/17/2019 7:54:00 PM Doubly so methinks Caren, thanks, Aloha wk

Kim Rodrigues Date: 5/17/2019 6:46:00 PM Love the shape! Looks like a martini glass. Cheers! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/17/2019 6:51:00 PM Being that 'crystal tulips' were a challenge to form Kim, Aloha wk

Panagiota Romios Date: 5/17/2019 5:33:00 PM Aloha Awesome William, You are beyond amazing, Panagiota Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/17/2019 5:45:00 PM Such niceties remembered Panagiota, Aloha wk

Vijay Pandit Date: 5/17/2019 3:15:00 PM WOW! So well written, William..splendid imagination. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/17/2019 4:20:00 PM Your words worth are invaluable Vijay, Aloha wk

Line Gauthier Date: 5/17/2019 2:52:00 PM Lovely, William. Beautifully executed. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/17/2019 2:56:00 PM You have my thanks Line, Aloha wk

Pat Adams Date: 5/17/2019 2:29:00 PM This is amazing William! Not only is it a concrete but a personification as well! Well done! I also have a grin on my face for another round!!..........pat Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 5/17/2019 2:31:00 PM Hehe, thanks a lot Pat for your input, Aloha wk