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Suicide Just before death came a spinning swirl. Lifeless body on the table lain. Lost in a world where hatreds whirl. Just before death came a spinning swirl. What a pity; she is a beautiful girl. Tears falling down like torrential rain. Just before death came a spinning swirl. Lifeless body on the table lain. © Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen January 7, 2010 Poetic Form: Triolet Suicide is deadly. Do not choose death. Choose LIFE. Call the National Suicide Prevention Hotline @ 1-800-273-8255.

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Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 1/26/2010 4:33:00 PM

Dear Dane-Ann, A great message of the Pain of Suicide to those YOU LOVED I was looking for YOUR "Elephant Dandruff" POEM but I could not Keep an eye on Ruben O as he wrote me and said he was going to try an "End Line Word POEM" also Carolyn Devonshire congratulated YOU on this new Form Sorry but I'm a little jealous although YOU are a Premium Member so YOU have a better chance of writing POETRYSOUP about this new Form LOVE YOU ALWAYS...HG

James Fraser

Date: 1/13/2010 2:46:00 PM

Wonderful message in your poem Dane Ann >> James

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/10/2010 2:30:00 PM

This is a brilliant eye opener, Dane Ann. I hope those who need to read this do because you offer a great option for help at the end. Very thoughtful of you to include the phone number, dear friend. Great work! Love, Carolyn

Colleen Bono

Date: 1/10/2010 12:01:00 PM

I posted a new poem I think you will like it.

Colleen Bono

Date: 1/10/2010 8:53:00 AM

You are so write.Hope All is well and thank you for listening.

Moonbee Canady

Date: 1/9/2010 2:08:00 PM

A Very Important Message, The Images Are Strong, as well as your desire to help... Beautifully Laid Out ... MoonBee

Kim Hilliker

Date: 1/9/2010 12:31:00 AM

Nice write. Suicide is an aweful thing. Thanks for offering a little hope and assistance.

John Loving Iii

Date: 1/7/2010 2:27:00 PM

paradox ie; "suicide is deadly" john

Edward Orozco

Date: 1/7/2010 9:31:00 AM

Amazing piece! Truly your kind words fall to rest upon my hearts racing thoughts- edward

Marty Owens

Date: 1/7/2010 8:23:00 AM

Very nioe poem with good information...Marty

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/7/2010 7:03:00 AM

Good idea for so many people who are gifted with poetic grace are of the melancoly disposition who knows it might save a life that has so much left to offer. Keep the creative and helpful pen flowing. Sara

Andrew Roza

Date: 1/7/2010 6:32:00 AM

Great poem! I love the from it flows well and the way you brought it to life, amazing. tough subject matter though.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/7/2010 5:42:00 AM

Wonderful Triolet.. a form of poetry u use so well with your words.. thankxxx for the info as many poets on Soup lean towards writing about Suicide.. this hotline info will be a good source for those in need or burdened with feelings to end their lives, which are so precious to God... thankxxx for this wonderful poetry Dane Ann... blessings.. luv.. Linda-Marie..

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 1/7/2010 5:31:00 AM

Very good message for those feeling troubled at heart..Excellent Dane..and hope you are better dear..Charma