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Suicidal Note

Tried again, I tried in vain Far away he went so far Train of thoughts I need to forget Upon which my life is hanging Forgive me, the cork of death opened. Submitted on November 28, 2019, for Five Word Challenge Poetry Contest sponsored by Beth Evans

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Pratap Roy

Date: 2/3/2020 4:16:00 AM

Very good poetic expression. God bless you.

Jenish Somadas
Date: 2/3/2020 4:18:00 AM

Thank you Pratap for your time to read my poems..

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 1/27/2020 5:16:00 AM

The cork of death unplugged ...

Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/27/2020 5:39:00 AM

Thank you Kai for reading my poems and commenting..

Anisha Dutta

Date: 12/8/2019 7:06:00 AM

EXCELLENT. Seems to be placed on TOP. All the best.

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/8/2019 9:24:00 AM

Thank you Anisha for your kind words..

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/8/2019 2:40:00 AM

"the cork of death" - I really like this term. Bravo!

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/8/2019 2:55:00 AM

Thank you Caren..

James Allen

Date: 12/5/2019 2:17:00 PM

Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing!

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/7/2019 10:45:00 PM

Thank you James..

Panagiota Romios

Date: 12/4/2019 1:27:00 PM

Caught in depression is painful as heck! People who have never faced the Unbearableness of life, get all pompous about this and think they are better. Others escape all the time through sex and drugs and think nothing of it. Anyone contemplating suicide should call the Suicide Hotline! Lives could be saved. I talked 2 people out of killing themselves. They need an ear who will not judge them.really! Great poem. Panagiota xxx

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/4/2019 10:38:00 PM

Thank you Panagiota for sharing your experience..

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/2/2019 12:24:00 PM

Tell those who feel this way that things will get better--don't end life! Very moving. Janice

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/2/2019 10:40:00 PM

Yeah, you are right.. It is a momentary state of mind.. If they were distracted from that thought at that moment, they will not end life like that.. Thanks for your visit..

Ann Foster

Date: 12/1/2019 8:58:00 AM

Also... great writing... just saying... even if sad... ... still powerful... and poignant.... on target for way too many...(even one is too many). Ann

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/1/2019 10:39:00 PM

Thank you..

Ann Foster

Date: 12/1/2019 8:57:00 AM

Put the cork back in. He is not worth it. I am telling you.... I know... His brother and his brothers brother are the same. The coddled enabler (the weak side...don't let it win) needs to be tossed to the curb. Take back what he took. It is you... You are yours... Hugs.... Ann

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/1/2019 10:38:00 PM

Dear Ann, I think recently you also wrote a poem on similar subject.. The difference is I pulled the cork while you remain silent with the 'I...'

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/1/2019 7:48:00 AM

If the world brings them such pain would it not be cruel for God to send them back?

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/1/2019 7:59:00 AM

Back in a different mindset.. A change in atmosphere will help even for a lost soul..

Brenda Chiri

Date: 12/1/2019 1:31:00 AM

Wow that was amazing!;)

Jenish Somadas
Date: 12/1/2019 2:16:00 AM

Thank you...

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/29/2019 8:46:00 AM

For some this world seems unbearable. It is sad that they arrive at their end so quickly.

Jenish Somadas
Date: 11/30/2019 10:50:00 PM

They were trying to escape from the world.. Not knowing they have to come back...

Jon Gutmacher

Date: 11/28/2019 10:06:00 AM

profound

Jenish Somadas
Date: 11/30/2019 10:46:00 PM

Thanks...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/28/2019 6:36:00 AM

Tragic conclusion to a tragic Man's unbearable life! Pray that no one reaches that point of no return! Well written dear Jenish!

Jenish Somadas
Date: 11/28/2019 7:18:00 AM

Thank you Demetrios..

Na Na

Date: 11/28/2019 2:04:00 AM

Hi Jenish, this is deep, Best of luck in the contest. I hope you didnt mind your name was in my newest poem A cup of poetry soup M M good.

Jenish Somadas
Date: 11/28/2019 2:47:00 AM

Thank you Gregory..