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Suicidal Note

Tried again, I tried in vain
Far away he went so far
Train of thoughts I need to forget
Upon which my life is hanging
Forgive me, the cork of death opened.




Submitted on November 28, 2019, for Five Word Challenge Poetry Contest sponsored by Beth Evans

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Pratap Roy

February 3, 2020 at 4:16 AM

Very good poetic expression. God bless you.

Jenish Somadas

February 3, 2020 at 4:18 AM

Thank you Pratap for your time to read my poems..

Kai Michael Neumann

January 27, 2020 at 5:16 AM

The cork of death unplugged ...

Jenish Somadas

January 27, 2020 at 5:39 AM

Thank you Kai for reading my poems and commenting..

Anisha Dutta

December 8, 2019 at 7:06 AM

EXCELLENT. Seems to be placed on TOP. All the best.

Jenish Somadas

December 8, 2019 at 9:24 AM

Thank you Anisha for your kind words..

Caren Krutsinger

December 8, 2019 at 2:40 AM

"the cork of death" - I really like this term. Bravo!

Jenish Somadas

December 8, 2019 at 2:55 AM

Thank you Caren..

James Allen

December 5, 2019 at 2:17 PM

Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing!

Jenish Somadas

December 7, 2019 at 10:45 PM

Thank you James..

Panagiota Romios

December 4, 2019 at 1:27 PM

Caught in depression is painful as heck! People who have never faced the Unbearableness of life, get all pompous about this and think they are better. Others escape all the time through sex and drugs and think nothing of it. Anyone contemplating suicide should call the Suicide Hotline! Lives could be saved. I talked 2 people out of killing themselves. They need an ear who will not judge them.really! Great poem. Panagiota xxx

Jenish Somadas

December 4, 2019 at 10:38 PM

Thank you Panagiota for sharing your experience..

Janice Canerdy

December 2, 2019 at 12:24 PM

Tell those who feel this way that things will get better--don't end life! Very moving. Janice

Jenish Somadas

December 2, 2019 at 10:40 PM

Yeah, you are right.. It is a momentary state of mind.. If they were distracted from that thought at that moment, they will not end life like that.. Thanks for your visit..

Ann Foster

December 1, 2019 at 8:58 AM

Also... great writing... just saying... even if sad... ... still powerful... and poignant.... on target for way too many...(even one is too many). Ann

Jenish Somadas

December 1, 2019 at 10:39 PM

Thank you..

Ann Foster

December 1, 2019 at 8:57 AM

Put the cork back in. He is not worth it. I am telling you.... I know... His brother and his brothers brother are the same. The coddled enabler (the weak side...don't let it win) needs to be tossed to the curb. Take back what he took. It is you... You are yours... Hugs.... Ann

Jenish Somadas

December 1, 2019 at 10:38 PM

Dear Ann, I think recently you also wrote a poem on similar subject.. The difference is I pulled the cork while you remain silent with the 'I...'