Tim Ryerson Poet Couplet

Succubus

Three nights in a row, exhausted, no sleep
Catatonic state, inner demons shall creep

Dose (Was I asleep?) jerk violently awake
Heavy pressure on chest, the weight of heartbreak

Arms spread; you were nailed to the living room wall
Struck dumb; I could not heed your faint, pleading c... 

***Succubus is the female form of Incubus, demons believed to torture their sleeping victims by lying on there chests

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Norma Arana March 10, 2014 at 4:48 AM Remarkable couplets artfully done. Congratulations, Tim.>> Norma

Dr.Ram Mehta March 9, 2014 at 4:43 AM Congratulations on the fine win. Enjoyed the rhyme perfect, tim

Verlena S. Walker March 9, 2014 at 1:35 AM Congratulations on the Tim... Verlena

Nette Onclaud March 9, 2014 at 1:28 AM splendidly written , tim... that hanging ' c...' took me by surprise!.. cheers to you on your fine win.. huggs

Kayod5 Kayode March 8, 2014 at 9:23 PM A great work indeed,congrats Tim.

Joyce Johnson March 8, 2014 at 5:02 PM Doesn't sound like fun but sometimes my 16 pound cat climbs up there. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Skat A March 8, 2014 at 4:34 PM your awesome.... SKAT

Juli- Michelle March 8, 2014 at 3:37 PM This poem helped inspire one of my own, "Daunting." Check it out if you feel so inclined. Congratulations on your place win in my contest. You deserve it :) -Juli-Michelle

Karen Anglesey July 29, 2013 at 11:47 AM WOW... very stark and scary theme. Well written. COngratulations on your win:)

Poet Destroyer A July 24, 2013 at 9:00 PM Tim, Congratulations!!! Thank you for the wonderful win. :-) Epic, it is. <3 always & forever <3 ''LINDA

Suzanne Delaney June 11, 2013 at 7:14 PM Congrats Tim I knew it was a winner. SuZ

Carrie Richards June 10, 2013 at 6:59 PM Oh wow........the last line unfinished........perfect!!!!!

Debbie Guzzi June 10, 2013 at 2:19 PM Congrad's on your win Light & Love

Skat A June 10, 2013 at 2:08 PM congrats in Roy's contest............. SKAT

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl June 10, 2013 at 1:27 PM Congratulations Tim xx

Nato Calubiran May 30, 2013 at 8:58 PM another version for nightmares. i have an entry for this contest too, "Come Out and Play"

Debbie Duncan May 30, 2013 at 4:48 PM I like this Tim,,,, I woke up 3 nights ago in rem sleep " I couldn't move" ;} as I was dreaming of my son opening front door, he said "0" get the cat mom. So I was trying to get up. I knew I was dreaming ;}

Carrie Richards May 30, 2013 at 4:12 PM Wow...........disturbing !!!! I think the heavy pressure on my own chest is terror!!......yikes!

Suzanne Delaney May 30, 2013 at 3:28 PM Very chilling. Rates high for Roy's contest. I haven,t been able to think of one yet. SuZ

Joseph May May 30, 2013 at 12:12 PM nicely penned Tim...I like that fourth verse...best wishes

Richard Lamoureux May 30, 2013 at 8:36 AM Scary stuff!

Tim Ryerson May 30, 2013 at 6:59 AM A Succubus is the female form of an Incubus