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Submerge

I had a glass of tea Then stood beside the sea I touched the waters edge And jumped the beaches ledge I swam almost a mile Then gave away a smile I feel I'll dive again Because I'm sure to win With luck when I am home I will not need a comb

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Paul Callus

Date: 12/11/2020 1:29:00 PM

What a cute rhyming poem, Angela. I definitely won't need a comb after swimming, but you have long hair and might need one:) Regards // paul

Angela Crabtree
Date: 12/11/2020 6:43:00 PM

Thank you, Paul. Yes, I definitely need one afterwards :)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 10/13/2020 3:26:00 PM

This frees me up and cools me up.

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/14/2020 8:47:00 AM

;)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 10/12/2020 5:37:00 PM

Seems like tea is the key!... As for 'comb,' it seals the poem! Enjoyed! Thanks, gw

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/13/2020 3:05:00 PM

Thank you, Gershon for reading. I just wanted to have some fun with this poem and it was the only thing I could come up with to end it ;)

Eve Roper

Date: 10/12/2020 3:59:00 PM

love the verse reminded me of a children song, I am always sing to my grandson.

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/13/2020 3:01:00 PM

Thank you, Eve. I'm sure he loves it too ;)

Silent One

Date: 10/12/2020 8:45:00 AM

Very nice...

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/12/2020 10:47:00 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it :)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/12/2020 6:52:00 AM

Since my wife's death I never went swimming again. It's stupid of me really. I love the sea. A lovely poem. A swimming cap should help though. ~~

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/12/2020 10:46:00 AM

Sorry to hear about your loss, Victor. ...I may try a swimming cap next time :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/11/2020 2:29:00 PM

You are having a great time! Pleasant write.

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/11/2020 3:04:00 PM

Thanks, Vijay. I love the water :)

Hannington Mumo

Date: 10/11/2020 1:53:00 PM

A sweetly flowing masterstroke...remains thematically sound still, despite the exactingly ambitious rhyme scheme. Superb job!

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/11/2020 3:02:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/11/2020 11:16:00 AM

- I'm sure you'll win, but I think you need a comb :) - A fun poem, Angela :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Angela Crabtree
Date: 10/11/2020 3:01:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. Just something that popped in my mind :)