Submarine

Upper lid shut All worries out I dive to meet my target I will hit it no doubt I stalk my prey All he can do is pray He will go down before, "Oh! Lord" he can say He will see what will be his last day God help him, if in my sights he comes All that is left of him will be blown up lumps My strike will put him in a tight jam 'Cause I am a Submarine- Yes I am.

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Derrick Burton

Date: 8/23/2009 12:02:00 AM

always faith and inspiration, thank you, you reach out to others with your poetry... enjoy your night! :):)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/14/2009 6:19:00 AM

Perhaps you should move the "Oh! Lord" he can say..down a line? I like the lilt of your language when translated to English. Please see my "Dialect around the world contest" and enter? Light & Love

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/25/2009 7:04:00 AM

Beautiful poem.

Karam Misra

Date: 3/30/2009 6:14:00 PM

Yeah, Manoj, way to go! You seem to be getting better and better. Keep it up. This is one terse bit of poetry which packs in a punch. Liked it very much. Gives good visual imagery of the stalker and the stalked. Predation! kc

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/24/2009 8:26:00 AM

Nice use of personification, Manoj! This is a great work.

Arany P.

Date: 3/12/2009 4:51:00 AM

haha kk is so funny! nice one there ... you've hit it no doubt! and thank you for your sweet comments! really appreciate them! ~ Arany

K K Iloduba Jnr

Date: 3/7/2009 1:53:00 PM

God help u too wen u re out of water too. A good attempt at poetry..........would nt u rather be a shark?cheers.