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Stricken

Before you i was content Unhappy but a smile was easier to fake You infiltrated my mind Seduced my body Engulfed my heart Freed my soul After you I’m drowning The hands i once held Refuse to reach for me The arms that once secured me Refuse to embrace me The lips that used to whisper i love you Will no longer breathe life into my body I’m alone in a somber darkness Forced to face my demons Lost and broken I am completely and utterly stricken

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/12/2019 8:26:00 AM

This is a sad one that is beautifully expressed.

Carol Eastman

Date: 9/5/2013 10:36:00 AM

The imagery and angst stand out. Sad but great write.

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 8/30/2013 11:44:00 AM

Drawn to this line "Unhappy but a smile was easier to fake" You gave me an overdose of passion on this one, where do you come up with some of these poems my friend??? Good Job! MC

Karl Eivers

Date: 7/3/2013 9:33:00 AM

very nice. im a fan already and this is the 1st of urs i read.

Valerie The Heavy Hearted Poet
Date: 7/3/2013 10:04:00 AM

Aaawwwhhh thank you!!!

Timothy Jacks

Date: 6/12/2013 7:40:00 PM

hey congrats on having your first poem featured. As my first poem was and I just wanna pass this on to you. it is what a Baptist Preacher once told me. Once you defeat one demon the devil sends a bigger one. But hey its no big deal may God surround you with His Angels as He does me!

Twanna Irisha

Date: 6/7/2013 10:46:00 PM

Love it. I placed you as one of my favorite poet :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/28/2013 5:31:00 PM

LOL, Stopping by this poem for the 3rd time. Valerie, Congratulations with your Featured Poem of the week :-) Take care, and enjoy the new coming week. Always & Forever! HUGS **LINDA**

Seosamh De Burca

Date: 4/24/2013 6:53:00 PM

Exceptional work. Heartfelt and honest, beautifully crafted you combine dark and light effortlessly. (Congrats on being featured poem also), I enjoyed your poem very much and look forward to reading more of your work.

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 4/24/2013 8:25:00 AM

I've come back to read more of your awesome work..I agree with the comment Angel Fire wrote.. this is intense. I feel every emotion inside of you. Excellent art madam!!

Angel Fire

Date: 4/23/2013 6:34:00 AM

this one really reaches in and grabs you by the heart. conveyed beautifully Valerie.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 4/22/2013 3:50:00 PM

welcome to poetry soup Valerie great lines you got up there , was thinking about shiners children 's hospital as I wrote concrete angel, glad you like it . you have an awesome day ;}

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/22/2013 8:12:00 AM

about your poem: I am stricken on how you piled up the loneliest feeling, after one is gone. I'm the kind of person I don't have to fake a smile...... however, I had a man who once took it all for me. the content of me being me.... hope your demons are not as bad as mine... xox~ Linda

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/22/2013 8:10:00 AM

Good morning Valerie, once again welcome to the soup .... xox~ thank you for the many comments on my poems... I'm glad you followed the imagery and deepness.... I wrote a new MONOKU; called... "The Playground" would you like to comment my newest poem for fun. I hope you enjoy it.... always- Linda

Skat A

Date: 4/16/2013 5:06:00 PM

Valerie :-), Stopping by to wish you a nice warm welcome to the Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best in your writings. I hope you find this community one of the best here on the net. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets, and myself? If you ever want or need feedback on any given poem, please feel free and look me up by clicking on my name anytime you see it.. Luv~*~SKAT