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Straightaway

straightaway bb cuts air heading for tin can - sudden gush of sprite

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023


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Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/2/2023 5:05:00 AM
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Ahh I did a bit of riflery working on a Summer Camp in North Carolina - never had the joy of shooting a can though! (Did get Marksman First Class NRA certification by the end of Summer though!) Great light hearted haiku x
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/2/2023 5:59:00 AM
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Thank you, Dilly! I usually don’t touch guns but grandsons… <3 and I enjoyed it! He joined JROTC. He showed me his positions - standing, kneeling, then lying on the ground. He is great on the rifle team.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/29/2023 1:10:00 PM
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your Haiku reminded me of my childhood days of shooting my brother's BB gun at cans, although most of the time they were empty. I got a kick out of your poem. Enjoy your weekend, Sara
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/29/2023 2:44:00 PM
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Thanks so much, Sara! :)
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 9/28/2023 7:52:00 PM
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hahahahahahaha... If bb hits 'Mountain Dew,' 'you're in's on you!'
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/29/2023 10:38:00 AM
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What a hearty laugh! Still it was my first time! So proud, next to my grandson.
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Jerry Brotherton
Date: 9/27/2023 5:21:00 AM
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A lighthearted Haiku Kim. I love it. Have a beautiful day my friend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/27/2023 10:31:00 AM
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Thank you, Jerry! My grandson was showing me how to shoot a b.b. gun! :)
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Bill Baker
Date: 9/26/2023 4:36:00 PM
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Got to watch those stray bbs! I like your Haiku, Kim. Something light to make things bright. Thanks, Bill
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/27/2023 10:31:00 AM
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We were careful :)
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Paige Hind
Date: 9/26/2023 2:43:00 PM
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Ha! I love that stuff!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/27/2023 10:32:00 AM
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Awesome, Paige!

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