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Story-Telling With the Moon

Along rails of ambivalent dreams,
Bittersweet yet luscious flashbacks
Take me back to my friend, the tactile moon – a 
 Quiescent basin of grace and alchemy:  we would utter
And laugh about legends quite arcane from books
Chipped from eve’s daily flamboyant story – telling rites…
As willows stoop like night’s immolation for more
Replays of drama, our guiding star acts as an intercessor
For excuses to prolong near dusk's trail in our former home--
This quintessence of a young spirit’s hunger to journey
Far across moon-friend’s range in an endless, mythical glide!



11.15.16
Ten word challenge -2 for John Hamilton

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Janis Medders Tobechi November 25, 2016 at 4:44 PM Wonderful imagery. Congratulations.

Suzanne Delaney November 15, 2016 at 6:42 PM Dear Nette: Marvelous poem and the words fit inconspicuously. Perfect timing for the super moon. Good Luck in the contest. I know it will place high. Hugs, SuZ

Joe Maverick November 15, 2016 at 2:14 PM Well Nette, I am tellingly tongue tested.' tripping in ties, and indeed trellises of rich imagery as supplied by your talented pen.' really worth the read.'

Eve Roper November 15, 2016 at 10:10 AM This is great, Nette, the use of the words are fascinating. :) Good luck in the contest already a high winner Hugs Eve

Supraja Kannan November 15, 2016 at 5:37 AM Great one... Good luck with the contest...

John Hardison November 14, 2016 at 9:12 PM Stretches the mind beautifully. Good use of lesser used word.7 lol Peace, Love and Joy.

Demetrios Trifiatis November 14, 2016 at 6:54 PM A challenge met in the most emphatically aesthetic way dear, nette! Good luck!

Jan Allison November 14, 2016 at 6:11 PM wow Nette you amaze me with your creativity - such a beautiful poem - you wove those difficult words in with apparent ease and told a lovely story:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Ball November 14, 2016 at 4:40 PM Excellent Nette. You are truly a first rat poet. Loved this. It has a magical quality to it and I could see a child sitting spell bound listening to the tales. A big seven from me. God Bless, JB

Daniel Turner November 14, 2016 at 4:06 PM Great job, Nette! A wonderful poem with some words one would not ordinarily use in a poem. You almost made them of no importance. Just lovely poetry:)

Freddie Robinson Jr. November 14, 2016 at 2:11 PM Beautifully penned, Nette. Very expressive and lush imagery. Top notch poetry. An excellent write, dear lady. Love and peace to you. RW (Romantic Warrior)

Kelly Deschler November 14, 2016 at 12:59 PM The moon is one of the best friends we can ever have. She will always be there for us, no matter what... Your poem took me on a wonderful journey, Nette, and I enjoyed it so much! ...Good luck in John's contest!

Chris Green November 14, 2016 at 11:45 AM This was beautiful Nette and such a wonderful use of the 10 words that were required. Good luck in the contest.

Anne-Lise Andresen November 14, 2016 at 11:04 AM - Mythical glide and exciting ... at any age, Nette - a great poem, good luck in the contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)