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Grandpa's miniature toy boat I borrowed the vintage to float Down the slope full of rain Oops gone down a storm drain Lucky Gramps didn't go for my throat Submitted on March 3, 2019, for contest DOWN A STORM DRAIN GONE FOREVER sponsored by EVE ROPER

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Date: 3/23/2019 2:53:00 AM
Hi Line, I can just imagine your Gramps face when you had to tell him what had happened - a very vivid short story - congratulations on your win in this fun contest! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 3/23/2019 6:19:00 PM
Thank you so much, Jennifer. I am very happy to confirm this is total fiction.
Date: 3/22/2019 7:08:00 PM
I can just picture it happening for real Line! many congrats:-) hugs jan xxx
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Date: 3/22/2019 9:00:00 PM
Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Jan.
Date: 3/22/2019 4:20:00 PM
line, thank you for entering my contest. You had clear and fascinating imagery and great rhythm and flow. I love the humor it reminded me of a few scrapes I went through when I was young. Congratulations on your 2nd place win. Come and visit me on my blog https://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry/blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=35331&PoetID=57242
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Date: 3/22/2019 9:01:00 PM
Thanks you so much, Eve. That was a fun challenge.
Date: 3/5/2019 6:46:00 PM
Yikes! But he loved you more than the boat!
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Line Gauthier
Date: 3/5/2019 7:05:00 PM
LOL didn't really happen - but could have...
Date: 3/3/2019 1:59:00 PM
you chose a perfect form to use for this contest. It's one I need to get going on. well done!
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Line Gauthier
Date: 3/3/2019 2:28:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea, for your much appreciated visit.
Date: 3/3/2019 11:46:00 AM
What a great entry for the contest, Line - a top winner for sure! I'm sure your Gramps even with his loss would be delighted to see you win with this one! Thx for your kind comment re my entry for the Bobby Mays contest. Bob
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Line Gauthier
Date: 3/3/2019 2:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, Robert, for your most appreciated compliment.
Date: 3/3/2019 4:59:00 AM
Reads like a good contender. It is good grandpa loved you so much. Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Sara
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Line Gauthier
Date: 3/3/2019 8:04:00 AM
Thanks, Sara. Much appreciated.