Storm

A cyclone forms, this tornado scorns
A near-by village retreat. 
Frightening to see.
Rain drops pound like drums,
whistling winds, sounds of a tambourine.
Striking distant lightening,
a fierce fear rapidly heightening.
I can't control my shaking hands..

It's cold, 
shivering in mother natures 
chilling submission hold.
Dark clouds twist into satanic forms.
Like that demonic figure,
with tremendous horns.
It is freezing cold now,
as this storm unfolds.
Boulder size hail is born,
I sit and video tape natures ****.
This storm rapes, vigorously.
This near-by village retreat.

Jared Pickett
11/4/09
Asavvy1
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Pickett Avatar
December 11, 2009 at 11:08 AM
Hey you wrote one that doesn't revolve around sex...Good one I like it....Dad
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November 20, 2009 at 6:16 AM
Well I was running for cover with this enthralling poem from u .. I see u also liked Izzy's Come Here poem.. both commented on it.. she is my dear friend too.. and this is certainly Asavvy 1... luv..Linda-Marie, P.E.P.S. "Sweetheart"
Culverhouse Avatar
November 11, 2009 at 5:24 PM
great poem, scary images!!
Gumbo Avatar
November 10, 2009 at 8:57 AM
outstanding write! Jarad, you flatter me with your wonderful comments considering such a talent in yourself! I always enjoy reading you and am eager for my days off so I can visit you and many more :)
Strand Avatar
November 9, 2009 at 12:18 AM
One of your best Jared.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
Goff Avatar
November 7, 2009 at 10:25 AM
poem of devastation, very much enjoyed! Jared! jimbo
Freeman Avatar
November 6, 2009 at 11:45 AM
This narration of the storm is very dramatic, having vivid picuture of destruction pending disaster, Good job, man, Sincerely, Moses
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November 4, 2009 at 2:00 PM
The vivid imagery forwards your thoughts in a creative way. Nature can be beautiful but destructive too. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. Karen
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November 4, 2009 at 12:06 AM
This work stand out, your creativity is on a high gear, keep up the good work. I left you some soup mail...Raul
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November 3, 2009 at 7:49 PM
Such storms can be quite frightening. Very good analogy to describe the horror to "nature's porn." Nice work, Jared. Love, Carolyn
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