Staying Alive Ii - the Wheel

Interesting visuals described sharply Daver take care Joe..)

talk about reflection...wow, Daver, this is it! ....off to the next part....

life and death. You still have breath, be blessed. sad, but I cannot seem to cry at death, I cry when I miss people, but I've never seen it either. Different kind of writing of its own, Thank you for sharing, I am sure the time will come for all to experience death, hopefully our journeys fullfillment to serve Our God is complete, I think thats the worst sin, is being called, and know what your purpose is: and not complete it before death come shuddering.... God bless, Cindy

So glad I found part 2; so sad we have to combat life. Some angles are worse than others but I'm glad for the in between parts; they make it all worthwhile. Great poem Daver, covers a lot of territory. Luv, Lizzie

You've caused that wheel to slow down a bit for me as I read and reread your poem Daver. A very interesting way to personify it as it goes round and round. Ya got me musin' again . have a great one. Daver. I'll be doing the same and just a hangin on to one of the spokes . God bless

I do need to study to understand the different forms- to appreciate more- I truly enjoyed reading your work, blessings, Brenda : )

life is an every day fight for some... Daver, love the depth in your poem,..p.d.

I love Tanka's Dave, I had a great time reading your poetry today..thanx dear poet ! Have a wonderful week my friend....much love, james

Interesting work..Not sure of the interpertation that you would have the reader to obtain from it though...Enjoyed reading your work..Sara

Thank you for sharing your love of poetry with us here at PoetrySoup . I enjoyed reading your amazing writing today. Love, Carol

I really like this one. Just love this form, tanka. GREAT last line, daver.

Wow Daver, this is a great Tanka! I absolutely love Tankas and you have written a fantastic one! Keep on writing them, they get easier with time! Awesome Work!!