Starstruck

First there was fireworks
then there was stars
couldn't think of anything else
but her smile. stars struck stars
and all I can see is the
glow of her beauty;
with rain instead of sunshine
it was all so divine




rhyme scheme: abcbdeff                  date submitted: 7/30/16
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August 2, 2016 at 1:17 PM
Johnny,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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August 2, 2016 at 12:02 PM
Congratulations on your win,Johnny, thank you for entering and welcome to soup. Hugs Eve
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August 13, 2016 at 12:40 AM
...i won something...? ??
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July 31, 2016 at 1:54 AM
Jonny,, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**
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