Laurentine G Poet Rhyme

Stars

within the catastrophe awaits a notion
a hook, a thread, an unfurling devotion

forever falling - cascading in time
to always be his and he always mine

sometimes we follow a fading star
find stories in its essence about who we are

about-turn and unravel to expose the substrate
temptation not required for emergence of fate

take a gamble to force the reveal
let go of languor, add tension we can feel

step off the edge and await pure black
find ourselves at the beginning of the very same track

I know him, I've known this but let me dive deeper
uncover the secrets not even known to their keeper

embrace the objective, move ahead of the curve
be inside the slow dance, but simultaneously observe

view backwards, race past predestination
objectively witness moments of true captivation

see from a distance what cognition requires
show me the equation that explains our desires

for we circle and cross and create maps in the sky
bound on this path and I need to know why

there must be wisdom to our blinking pulsation 
a purpose that explains all of creation 

let me learn of the spark and effervesce in the trail
become one with the meaning as you lift the veil

let me overload and explode into glorious ash
to immerse and burn out in final rapturous flash

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Ink Empress April 17, 2026 at 8:37 AM This is a big fave btw! This one speaks to my soul! :D Laurentine G April 17, 2026 at 8:48 AM Yes I wrote in rhyme as a means of disguise as I'm usually free verse :) Ink Empress April 17, 2026 at 8:47 AM I am literally weak and biased for poems that touch my soul! Honestly u are too good! Never stop writing! Im a big fan and i ddnr know this was urs when i was judging! So that shows! Laurentine G April 17, 2026 at 8:45 AM Hahaha I shall bring my fave measuring device along - if your thumb isn't sore then it's not faved enough lol

Ink Empress April 17, 2026 at 7:33 AM Dear LG, When i read this first while judging, I was thinking, how unique is this take? How impressive and how thought provoking and what a poem that rhymes but sounds so natural nothing forced just effortlessly shining and touching the soul of reader, like no other, this has so many lines that made me feel so deeply especially “I know him, I've known this but let me dive deeper uncover the secrets not even known to their keeper” wow! Just so very evocative! I felt that! Congratulations on your win! Thank you for joining! Sending you light always Laurentine G April 17, 2026 at 8:47 AM What an amazing line up you have here Ink! So wonderful to see everyone supporting your contest with such high quality poetry :) thank you so much for my placement, it was a pleasure to write for x

Paige Hind April 12, 2026 at 11:14 PM Woah- pulling into intensity!! love it Laurentine G April 17, 2026 at 10:37 AM Thanks so much Paige :)

David Kavanagh April 5, 2026 at 4:07 AM A beautiful vision of the stars LG, and all in flawless couplets, maybe reflecting binary systems, I often ponder if the secrets are ever known to their keeper; it is a slow dance for a very long time, until that rapturous flash from the ash, how good is that line to finish on, lots of other juicy lines to (view backwards) as we do when observing, I can only imagine Ink will love this powerful piece, a great one for the contest and a fave from storm Dave lol! Laurentine G April 5, 2026 at 6:19 AM I have zero interest in living forever - maybe I'd be tempted if breaks were built in and felt but the entirety still fit together concertina style rather than an endless loop... Life and stars need a story arc and intensity :) David Kavanagh April 5, 2026 at 5:04 AM Oh definitely! I always prefer to see these cosmic poems go out with a cataclysmic flash, I feel sorry for the red dwarfs though, they almost live forever, not one has ever died naturally in the history of the universe! Laurentine G April 5, 2026 at 4:44 AM Haha - I had to return home amidst storm Dave as the dog said 'no chance' when the hail stones started :) that's a powerful fave in my pocket, thank you! I was hoping for a unique angle, so I chanced a few unpoetic words that fit the macro/micro v reincarnation layering I was trying for. I have to confess I almost swooned when I wrote "be inside the slow dance, but simultaneously observe" ha - it feels like it encompasses my poetry style somehow :) the secret keepers probably don't know the half of it - I wonder if 'feeling' is bigger than knowing. Thanks for picking out the bits I'm most pleased with :) ha that rapturous flash seemed the only ending that makes sense!