Susan Ashley Poet Pantoum

Starlit Diva

My mind has wings and wants to fly
into galaxies where stars streak.
Aloft on whispers and a sigh
a hint of stardust on my cheek.

Into galaxies where stars streak
aurora borealis gives me flair,
a hint of stardust on my cheek
starlit diva with solar hair.

Aurora borealis gives me flair
through cosmic currents I do swing,
starlit diva with solar hair
enjoying my celestial fling.

Through cosmic currents I do swing 
aloft on whispers and a sigh,
enjoying my celestial fling
my mind has wings and wants to fly.


Susan Ashley
July 24, 2017


~ 4th Place ~
Premiere Contest: End July 2017
Sponsor: Brian Strand

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Valerie Staton January 17, 2019 at 10:39 AM I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Susan Ashley January 22, 2019 at 8:15 PM Thank you, Valerie, for your gracious visit. Your precious comments are held in my truest appreciation. I’m so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Schneiter February 23, 2018 at 6:09 PM This is flat-out wonderful. I love the flow and how one stanza is "wedded" to the next. Also, the imagery is nothing short of magnificent. The repetitive "Aloft on whispers and a sigh" is a jewel. Standing ovation! Hugs, always, Paul Susan Ashley February 24, 2018 at 12:30 PM Thank you Paul for your beautiful and uplifting comments. I appreciate your lovely thoughts and am delighted by your visit. It's very nice to meet you.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Lekha Sharma December 27, 2017 at 3:49 AM A very big fan of yours.. I have become after reading your beautifully penned work! Susan Ashley December 27, 2017 at 8:41 PM Thank you Lekha for your beautiful comments and I am deeply appreciative and humbled by your wonderful words. My warmest wishes to you for a lovely new year.. ~Susan

Paul Callus December 11, 2017 at 10:50 AM Once again you tackle this form with flair and a showering of stardust, Susan. I can imagine you as a starlit diva with solar hair! With a pen like yours you will always be able to fly high. ~ Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley December 11, 2017 at 4:12 PM Paul, your lovely thoughts and comments glitter like precious gems and I relish your wonderful words always my friend. Thank you for your inspirational and shining presence that encourages me to fly ever further into the poetic galaxy of star-dusted musings.. :) Warmest wishes my 'starlit' friend ~Susan

Ralph Sergi November 1, 2017 at 2:45 PM This poem has such a beautiful flair, Susan. The very idea of a mind wanting to fly!. Congratulations! Susan Ashley November 1, 2017 at 8:18 PM Ralph, seeing you on my poetry page is always such a pleasure. Thank you for your beautiful visit and comment on my whimsical poem. I'm so happy you enjoyed it! Your kind, heartwarming words are always so appreciated.. ~Susan

John Michaels November 1, 2017 at 1:18 PM You're so good at this form, Susan. Congrats on having your wonderful poem featured this week! Excellent imagery takes us on a breathless ride. Well done! Kind regards, John. Susan Ashley May 30, 2020 at 9:39 PM I don't know how I missed your lovely comments and warm congrats, John. Thank you truly for your uplifting words and please accept my apologies for my very late response in expressing my appreciation for your kindness. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

John Gondolf November 1, 2017 at 10:07 AM Hi Susan, I just found this poem on the home page as one of the featured poems this week. I enjoyed very much. I need to spend more time on your page reading some of your older work; you are such a gifted writer. Susan Ashley November 1, 2017 at 8:22 PM John, thank your for your generous and kind compliments. Please, spend as much time as you'd like on my page reading my older poems.., the thought fills me with joy! I so appreciate your lovely comment John, your encouraging support and the time you take to share your wonderful thoughts with me. Warmest regards my friend! ~Susan

Arturo Michael September 21, 2017 at 10:37 PM My mind is taking wings to fly... Enjoyed your poem...A celestial fling won't be bad...Good night my friend Susan Ashley September 22, 2017 at 8:12 PM Good evening Arturo, I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. If your mind has wings you can have a celestial fling my friend! Lol! I hope you have a fabulous and fun weekend! :) Susan

Tim Smith August 22, 2017 at 7:51 AM An amazing piece Susan Susan Ashley August 22, 2017 at 8:29 AM Thank you Tim for your wonderful comment and your visit is greatly appreciated. I'm glad you enjoyed :)

Robert Lindley August 16, 2017 at 10:08 PM I'VE NEVER WRITTEN IN THAT POETRY FORM BUT YOUR GEM MAKES IT QUITE APPEALING TO READ... A FAV.... Susan Ashley August 16, 2017 at 10:29 PM Hi Robert, I so appreciate your lovely comment and kind visit. I'm so happy that you enjoyed reading about my celestial journey! Many thanks for the fav as well :)

John Fleming August 11, 2017 at 2:32 PM I have never taken much note of this Pantoum type form of poetry before...in all fairness it is rather quite appealing. Very nicely constructed, Susan; enjoyed the read - My best regards! :) john Susan Ashley August 11, 2017 at 8:22 PM Hi John, thank you for reading my poem and for leaving your wonderful comment. I love writing pantoums because I like the repetition of lines throughout the poem. Maybe I'll read one from you someday.., I hope so :)

Dean Wood July 29, 2017 at 11:41 PM Nice job with this difficult form Susan. This is lovely and fun to escape to the stars with you. Congratulations on your win! - Dean Susan Ashley July 30, 2017 at 7:43 AM Hi Dean, what a beautiful comment. Thank you for your comment and for coming along for the ride! :)

Gregory Richard Barden July 28, 2017 at 9:27 PM This is a gorgeous Pantoum, Susan, and such exquisite subject matter ... I love to write and read about anything celestial - congrats on your win! :-) Susan Ashley July 28, 2017 at 10:33 PM Hi Greg, I appreciate you comment so very much! Like you, I love to read or write about celestial subjects but I have a dark side too lol! I just posted one tonight called Fated Hell and it's pretty dark. Please read if you have a chance and let me know what you think... Thank you Greg and again, congrats to you! :)

Janice Canerdy July 28, 2017 at 12:58 PM LOVELY and skillfully-written, Susan! Congratulations on your win with this challenging form! Janice Susan Ashley July 28, 2017 at 8:13 PM Hi Janice, thank you so much for your beautiful comment and for reading my poem. I appreciate the congrats and can I also say congratulations back to you for your win as well! Hummingbirds is lively and lovely! :)

Heidi Sands July 26, 2017 at 7:43 AM Wow Susan. What a perfect well written Pantoum this is! You do well with this form! A favorite :) Susan Ashley July 26, 2017 at 7:24 PM Hi Heidi, thank you for your enthusiastic response to my Pantoum. I absolutely love this form with its repetition that harkens back to the previous stanza. I'm so happy that you liked it so much and saved it as well! :)

Akkina Downing July 24, 2017 at 6:05 PM Oh Starlit diva with solar hair, how I love it so :) Susan this is absolutely beautiful. Definitely favoring it :) Susan Ashley July 24, 2017 at 7:12 PM Hi Akkina, thank you very much for your response to my poem and for the fav. I’m so happy you enjoyed my celestial fling :)

Daniel Turner July 24, 2017 at 9:38 AM May I barrow a little of your stardust, Susan:) A well written and fun pantoum! Susan Ashley July 24, 2017 at 6:58 PM Thank you Daniel, you may have all the stardust you want... but I have a feeling you've got a little stash of you own.., how else could your poems sparkle so..? :)