Stardust

Like smoke from Grandpa's old cigars,
I watch a swell of gleaming stars
drift in waves of brilliant dust
like crumbs from smoldering crust.
I wonder where they might lead,
which starving soul they might feed.
Like smoke from Grandpa's old cigars,
I watch a swell of gleaming stars.


Written: 7/5/2013
For Nette's "Stardust in an Octelle" contest 
By Heather Ober
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

A  Avatar
July 18, 2013 at 10:21 PM
Heather, I love your star dust winning poem. Congratulations! Luv* SKAT
Chircop Avatar
July 17, 2013 at 4:21 PM
You are very tslented and creative dear Jeather..lovely
Ellison Avatar
July 17, 2013 at 3:17 PM
Love this one my dear Heather! Particularly love the "smoke from Grandpa's old cigars!" Hugs, Jack xoxox
Kendrick Avatar
July 17, 2013 at 1:23 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
Onclaud Avatar
July 16, 2013 at 4:01 AM
smokin' and well written, heather.. congrats on your placement in my contest.. do check my blog..:) hugggs!.:)
Lamoureux Avatar
July 15, 2013 at 9:14 PM
This made me think of my grandpa and his pipe, I loved the smell of his tobacco. Thanks for this memory. Congratulations.
Hamilton Avatar
July 15, 2013 at 7:10 PM
Heatherlovely poem congrats shadow x smiles
Kendrick Avatar
July 11, 2013 at 5:15 PM
Reads likw winning material to me..Enjoyed reading it today..Good luck in Nette's contest...Sara
Ryerson Avatar
July 10, 2013 at 4:00 PM
Whew!...What can I say? You've done it again here my friend...The way you blend your grandpa's cigars with the rest is brilliant and then the crumbs and starving souls?...Whew!
Goff Avatar
July 9, 2013 at 7:10 PM
Heather....pulled dreamily into this mesmerizing poem! Good Work! jimbo
Tacito Avatar
July 8, 2013 at 2:27 PM
What spectacular word flow! "Dust like crumbs from smoldering crust" <--- THIS line! Damn.
Heckman Avatar
July 8, 2013 at 10:41 AM
beautiful memory...nicely done
Zerbst Avatar
July 8, 2013 at 8:54 AM
The stars were awesome last night, but I could not come close to this if I attempted to describe them. I consider this the perfect little stardust poem, regretting that any words I may say on the subject would not do it justice. ~ I was so pleased / thrilled / overjoyed to read your last comment on my poem. I am forever grateful that you take time to beautifully express what you think of my poems, and wish that I could respond more eloquently.
Onclaud Avatar
July 6, 2013 at 7:25 AM
soup mail!..:)
Dietrich Avatar
July 5, 2013 at 10:13 PM
OMG, this SHOULD be used in the contest. Go ahead and enter it. I am sure half the people here will not do it right. they will either not personify or they will get the form wrong. Please enter it. This is outstanding. this form seemis very similar to triolet. I will have to give it a go !!
Manassian Avatar
July 5, 2013 at 12:13 PM
Music to my ears...So beautiful, sweetie. Just like you. You have so much beauty in that soul of yours. I'm so proud of you. Too bad it can't be entered in the contest.... :( Love it anyway. Hugs!
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace