Caroline Cécile Delacroix Poet Cinquain

Star Sparked Eyes

He watched
Eyes upon the sea 
He observed her movements
Measuring her soul's momentum,
He rose.
He ran
To her, ready
Prompted by her appeal 
He knew the place to be and braved
Her waves.
Until
He reached the spot,
Where he felt he must be 
She rose high, he stood and rode her
Steady.
Went on
Under her crest
Stable on his surf board
His hand touching lightly her wall,
Surfed passed
Before
Her awesome wave
Crashed, joyful sounds she made
Proud, he swam to shore, sat, his eyes
Star sparked.

By CarolineCécile
Copyright © 05.18.11

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The Fringe June 1, 2011 at 6:44 PM Perhaps the waves are beliefs. If taken not too seriously, there is great joy to be found in them. If not, then religions are formed. To love the surf for the sake of comfort is........ well, where the star sparkling eyes come from. I hope you don't mind my crazy thoughts, but cool thoughts come into my little brain when reading your stuff. I like it :)

Matt Hunt May 20, 2011 at 4:15 PM This is good. I have never surfed, but this makes me want too:) Great Job. R.M. Caroline Cécile Delacroix May 20, 2011 at 4:28 PM Thank you for your comment. I haven't surfed either. :) But have watched some incredible stunt. I imagine such people having a sort of relationship with the ocean. Thanks again. Caroline.

Carolyn Devonshire May 19, 2011 at 4:36 PM Caroline, I tried surfing when I was young and was able to ride the waves on my knees on the surfboard. Your poem is so beautifully written. I love the way you personify the sea as a woman and the man feeling such joy as he catches "her" wave. Wish I could experience that as well, but I'm getting a little "long in the tooth" to try now. Exciting ride you took us on! Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta May 19, 2011 at 10:39 AM Creative and nice visual, caroline

Carol Sunshine Brown May 19, 2011 at 10:21 AM Thank you for sharing your fabulous poetry today Caroline. It was a very interesting piece to read. Love, Carol

James Foulk May 19, 2011 at 10:18 AM I have never seen anyone surf in person, but have seen many flilms of them also i am a big Beach Boys Fan. this was the type of poem that was like a flilm, where i could see everything you wrote. a great write. thank you for commenting on Tender Heart, yes it seems just like yesterday we were dating and 41 yers later, hard to believe.