Stalemate

The early days were bubbles
When days passed in moments 
And the air between us
Never escaped.
Soon after something died
As if it was all normal
Like you blow off the candles
After a romantic dinner.
When silence became the norm
We didn't ask why,
There wasn't a breaking storm,
Not even a feisty sky.
Then,
One day she was gone.
We still love each other 
Strange as it may sound.
Now we want to be friends.
Who could have known then
This is how it ends,
In a stalemate.

Placed 3rd: Strand choice C contest by Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Kendrick Avatar
January 14, 2024 at 6:03 AM
I have read your work and enjoyed reading it. Keep on writing, using your creative muse. Congratulations on this winner. Sara K
May Avatar
December 19, 2023 at 3:30 PM
Once something goes awry in a relationship we may find ourselves in the friend zone, Very nicely penned Vijay
Dietrich Avatar
April 19, 2019 at 5:50 PM
I am clicking away and cannot find any poem I have not read and commented to , Vijay! Anyway , I reread this one, and I have to say, it's one of my favorites from you.
Dietrich Avatar
September 19, 2018 at 3:27 PM
oh my. It's sad to see this happen and it happens way too often! I enjoyed finding this one of yours way back in the first page of your poetry
Shepard Avatar
April 5, 2018 at 12:22 AM
This just proves, when something ended something just as wonderful began. Well done.
Pandit Avatar
April 5, 2018 at 7:36 AM
Thank you Anna.
Buckner Avatar
April 4, 2018 at 9:14 PM
I love this keep it up
Pandit Avatar
April 5, 2018 at 7:36 AM
Thank you Vandyke.
Robinson Jr. Avatar
October 31, 2017 at 10:38 AM
Excellent poem, Vijay. Your take on a relationship is poetically illuminating. Love the ending ... it speaks true to how a many of relationships end. Powerful poetry. Aurora bright write. Love and joy always.
Pandit Avatar
October 31, 2017 at 11:08 AM
Thank you Freddie!
Vacek Avatar
September 11, 2017 at 5:13 PM
This reminds me of one relationship in particular. In that instance it was almost as if both candles we're snuffed with a single breath. The early days were like bubbles...the air between us never escaped. And yet the bubbles simply disappeared into the bluest of skies.
Vacek Avatar
September 12, 2017 at 4:50 PM
Vijay...Your bubble analogy inspired me to delve deeper into the theme of bubbles and new love in a poem I wrote entitled, "Two Breaths Away From Love"
Pandit Avatar
September 11, 2017 at 5:20 PM
You wrote such a lovely poetic comment.. looking forward to reading your poems Michael!
Sands Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 6:01 PM
This is very good too! :)
Pandit Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 7:26 PM
Thanks Heidi. Love your feedback.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
July 31, 2017 at 1:11 PM
True. Excellent pen.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
July 31, 2017 at 10:42 PM
Honoured and humbled :) xomo!
Pandit Avatar
July 31, 2017 at 2:48 PM
Really appreciate your feedback. Coming from you it means a lot. I am new, but have seen some of your work and hope to learn from it.
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