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Premiere Contest WinnerSpring Last Whiff

Spring’s last whiff

wafted delightfully
          through my parents
                bedroom window
where I swung myself
                at that time
after a distressing storm
                scenting of newness
        light as angel hair
stroking my nose
arousing a sublime
              serendipity

Maybe that’s when
poetry flowed
                    from the brood
           or possibly
the years of injury
    from a cracked
            first wedding
or missing my dad
early on
just as I lacked him most
                        who grasps

Though I believe
poetry came from
      a beauteous strange
                        amalgamation
        of life’s vicissitudes
churning emotions &
propelling them into words
        alike now
                as I gaze out
over snow-covered fields
    gently rolling under
            powder blue sky
while a couple of sparrows
                  chirp happily
assuring all
spring is nearly absconding from
                           the meadow 

1St Place Contest Winner


Written: June 18, 2022

A BRIAN STRAND PREMIERE CHOICE Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Calasibetta Avatar
June 26, 2022 at 9:27 AM
A beautiful metaphor of life~congratulations on your win in the contest. :)Paulette
Kauffman Avatar
June 24, 2022 at 8:46 AM
This is so wonderfully creative Lasaad. I enjoyed your use of words that created the scent of spring as it moved on into a new season of life - your life. Nice metaphor. Congratulations on your trophy win! Blessings my friend!
Agustin Avatar
June 22, 2022 at 12:52 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me delight in Spring's beauty though I live in a "Springless" country. God bless you.
Seeker Avatar
June 21, 2022 at 7:35 AM
Congratulations on your top win, Sotto! Brilliantly penned indeed
Alex Avatar
June 20, 2022 at 11:57 PM
It's, indeed, a great painting. Congratulations!
George Avatar
June 20, 2022 at 10:03 PM
Congratulations on your prestigious trophy win dear friend Lasaad ! Great recognition !
Mccann Avatar
June 20, 2022 at 7:43 PM
This is so fresh, you can feel the breeze
Cunningham Avatar
June 20, 2022 at 12:14 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Lasaad, so well written. Tom
Poet Avatar
June 20, 2022 at 12:32 PM
Thank you so much, Tom. So much appreciated
George Avatar
June 19, 2022 at 9:00 AM
This is a lovely poem expressing spring's oncoming goodbye, in tandem with your personal experiences and your initiation into poetry....
Hankins Avatar
June 18, 2022 at 1:01 PM
I like this a lot, Lasaad. I could picture your images so well. Nicely written.
Pandit Avatar
June 18, 2022 at 11:15 AM
Excellent write, Lasaad, in superb vocabulary. Enjoyed the glimpse of your hues of spring.
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