Spring

spring brings first catch of the sun
earth moves nudity undone
we weathered the grim labours
until embrace - self respun

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Sam Kauffman

March 27, 2026 at 10:46 AM

Congratulations on your win. Sending you the joy of spring blessings!

Laurentine G

March 27, 2026 at 10:47 AM

Thank you so much Sam :)

Tania Kitchin

March 26, 2026 at 1:08 PM

LG, nicely done. Congratulations on your top winning placement.

Laurentine G

March 27, 2026 at 1:40 AM

Thank you Tania :)

Terry Miller

March 26, 2026 at 2:03 AM

Brilliant, congratulations

Laurentine G

March 26, 2026 at 2:14 AM

Thanks Terry :)

Suzette Richards

March 26, 2026 at 1:45 AM

The link to your poem has been added to my article 'Jueju - The Little Poem with a Big Heart', as per the contest description

Laurentine G

March 26, 2026 at 1:57 AM

Wonderful, thanks for including me :)

Suzette Richards

March 26, 2026 at 1:20 AM

Congratulations on your second-place win, Laurentine, with this excellent jueju. The strong opening image: ‘spring brings first catch of the sun’ feels immediate and seasonal. The closing couplet, with its smooth enjambment, has a philosophical turn: ‘we weathered the grim labours / until embrace self respun’. The final phrase (3 syllables) lands well after the natural pause and the phraseology compliments the first line.

Suzette Richards

March 26, 2026 at 3:08 AM

We take inspiration from sources as they presented them - even my inspiration for contests:)

Laurentine G

March 26, 2026 at 1:57 AM

Thank you so much Su, I was pleased when this came together :) I can thank the actual first bit of sun as it shone on me and I wrote the first line haha :)

Andrea Dietrich

March 8, 2026 at 7:30 PM

Perfecto. Bravo!

Laurentine G

March 9, 2026 at 1:21 AM

Woohoo! Thanks Andrea :) nature is always a tricky one for me to muse about, so I'm thrilled to get your approval :)

Ink Empress

March 5, 2026 at 5:42 AM

I dont think ive ever written a jueju, but now im curious and eager to try one after reading your beautiful one! So well woven! And gives that soul warming effect with the serene imagery of the spring sun! How stunning! Pleasure reading this. If this is for a contest. Best wishes! Sending you light always

Laurentine G

March 5, 2026 at 5:59 AM

You're cute! Thank you for taking a look at what I've been writing :)

David Kavanagh

March 4, 2026 at 2:49 PM

This is so clever Laurentine, a jeuju with meaningful personification, the lines are both creative and innovative, not easy to achieve with so few words, a great one for contest, cheers David

Laurentine G

March 4, 2026 at 11:38 PM

Thanks David - the sun was actually shining on me to inspire the first line but the second line arrived without warning lol - the rules were quite complex for this contest, so it had me thinking outside the box, but I'm not sure I've quite met the requirements. I enjoyed writing for a contest though - I definitely need the practice for writing differently to ignite some of the previous poet areas of my brain and see what they can do. Thank you for your visit :)

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