Spiralling

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"God has a plan and God is in control of everything" - Beyonce Knowles

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A Jinjagoliath poem:
13th January 2024
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                             Sipping the
                           Poisoned, dark
                         Inky medicine..
               I am Remiscent of a
             strange Alchemy
              silently lulLing the 
            unsuspecting Lovers
             surreptitiously Into the twisty,
                   snakey, turNy underworld of
                                Gnarly trees and
                       rootS that writhe to
                       triP the unwary heart.
               a pastIche of memory that
                       Reminds of 
                      Alluring all
                  the Lost souls
                        sLowly
                           Into the 
                             Nocturnal
                              Gaze of the
                         omniScient
                      ever Present,
                ever lovIng
                    fatheR and creator
                         of All things;
                          indeLible,
                            everLasting,
                              consIstently
                                  eNgaged for
                                  Goodness

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Bill Baker

Date: 1/22/2024 3:42:00 PM

Very creative poetry, Christopher. A shape poem as you presented your thoughts to us through your poetry. Very impressive! Have a great day! Bill

Christopher Grieves
Date: 1/22/2024 9:13:00 PM

Bless you Bill! Really appreciate you taking time :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/15/2024 12:37:00 PM

This is damn good. Great formatting to add to the effect. Add the narration and it’s a triple threat.

Christopher Grieves
Date: 1/15/2024 1:06:00 PM

That is very encouraging, Richard! And a poetic reply to boot. Blessings - really like your work.

Christina Bowring

Date: 1/15/2024 10:22:00 AM

Hello my friend. Visually this is spectacular and as Sara says, perfect for spiralling. You said you were going to try different things and this is great. Very impressed! Love your choice of words that all link together so well to create profoundness. ‘ Silently lulling the unsuspecting lovers’. Dramatic. Love the narration as always which enhances the words and brings them spiralling down! Keep inspiring. Be back to visit soon. :):)

Christopher Grieves
Date: 1/15/2024 12:25:00 PM

Thank you kindly Christina, you are very correct that your words of encouragement inspired me to 'have a go'. Not sure if this is just form over function - but the beauty is.. I can change the words and keep the form! Blessings :))