spider's web hiku

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For Brian Strand's 1392 Poetry Contest 24 June 2025

\ - \ |- | - / \(\-\ o_/- /_ )/ arms stretch like sun rays --( \-\^^Oo/ -/ ) ---- swaying in morning waltzes ~ /( -/--/--\ -\-)\ woven bridge of lace / / | \ \

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/8/2025 1:14:00 PM

A beautiful way of seeing a spider web!

Valsa George

Date: 7/1/2025 5:16:00 AM

Dear Jez, as ever, you prove once more that you are a master of shape haiku. I don't like to be caught by those 'arms' to be on the 'woven bridge of lace'! Many a time I have been touched by those sticky arms and it is disgusting....

Sally Eslinger

Date: 6/30/2025 8:00:00 AM

JCB, WOW! So brief and concise…But by the end, you had me outside, in my backyard, walking thru a large one of those lacy, web bridges! Feeling its light moisturecollasping on my bare arms…Why hadn’t i ssen it? How had the spider gotten from one side to the other, 4’ above ground?

Ink Empress

Date: 6/26/2025 3:27:00 AM

How elegant and clever and deep is your shape hiku. I love the way youv illustrated the web and written your hiku here too in such a creative manner! "Bridge of lace " " arms stretch like sunrays" my fave lines here! Definitely a fave for me! Sending you light always

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2025 9:52:00 PM

Would not want to get caught in that web!! Good ku there.

Ghairo Daniels

Date: 6/25/2025 8:39:00 PM

Too Beautiful ! ThkU 4 offering, JCB.x.

Tom Woody

Date: 6/23/2025 5:19:00 PM

Yeah but sucks if yer a fly. Fosho