Sparrow In My Eye

sparrow in my eye —
could have been the sun, perhaps,
except for its beak
chewing the fat, calling for
a mate, gossiping tweetly

5/19/2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Krutsinger Avatar
May 20, 2021 at 8:20 AM
"chewing the fat, calling for a mate," This is so much like a fluffy fat arrogant male sparrow!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 20, 2021 at 11:24 AM
LOL! Thanks.
Buhagiar Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 11:13 PM
A great metaphoric take. I believe there's a song for it. HUgs
Rodrigues Avatar
May 20, 2021 at 3:43 AM
La la...His eye is on the spar—rooow, and I know he watches me! My singing is for the birds so I will stop ;)
Devonshire Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 11:17 AM
What a cute tanka, Kim. Would hate to have a bird's beak in my eye :) Enjoyed immensely -- can't stop smiling. Hugs, Carolyn
Rodrigues Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 11:22 AM
Was not meant literally! Comparison to the sun in the eye :) Thanks, Carolyn!
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