Space Waves

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waiting 
     milky Way 
  eyes
      riding 
  shooting star

  choosing 
    hallucinations
  tumbled 
 from modicum 
   heart
 scattering 
  under light 
   &blood red moon

 grasped?
   defying 
  lookup
 remember
   stars are
lost dreams
   &gazing 
    back 
 at you

  yet
  mourns
each stolen
   soul
 crying 
    muted
 again never
    cogitate on
 dawn
   nor
   sun lentigines

   expectations 
      enters two
  shades:
     torment
  &fear
       black 
  for isolation
      red
        for blood
&Intoxication

Written: Sep 12, 2022

A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE   using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable.
Copyright © Brian Strand

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Michael Tor

Date: 9/13/2022 8:40:00 AM

Well written Lasaad I am impressed with this form and it is very difficult to accomplish. You have done an excellent job with it. Brian will be pleased with this great example of Poetry...

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/13/2022 12:39:00 AM

An unusual form Lasaad, you're not afraid to leave your comfort zone when it comes to trying new forms. Best of luck in the contest, hope you are keeping well. Tom

Valsa George

Date: 9/12/2022 8:29:00 PM

remember stars are lost dreams &gazing back at you..... So true! I don't know much about an open form verse. But really enjoyed your exploration into space. All the best in the contest, sweet friend