Black Eyed Susan Poet Couplet

Soul Sisters

"Imagine a lovely garden, tea for two, and this story . . . "


Two soul sisters knew at once
That they were kindred spirits, under the sun

After too many moons, hanging by ropes,
They breathed in life and sparkled with hope

Till somehow they let their friendship flutter away -
Like dandelion wisps on a gray, windy day

The loss, like a stone, in their hearts' homes,
But each too proud, to let the other one know


8/15/11

Received 6th place in  “I Fancy Another Sad Poem” Contest

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Dinda Minardi September 7, 2011 at 11:18 AM Ouch, this is everyone can relate, Susan. How our ego always effortlessly win over our little heart.

Wilma Neels August 29, 2011 at 1:37 PM A real beauty Susan, congratulations on your win, I love the "Like dandelion wisps on a gray, windy day" stunning line ;)

Carol Sunshine Brown August 23, 2011 at 8:38 AM Congratulations on your placement in Constance's "I Fancy Another Sad Poem" contest Susan. I am honored to be on the winners list with you. Love, Carol

John Freeman August 21, 2011 at 3:26 PM This surely touches a special place in my heart, Susan. Congratulations on your honored poem. Agape, Moses

Andrea Dietrich August 21, 2011 at 11:36 AM I loved this the first time I saw it, Susan. Congrats on your win. this was a short poem but very effective. Luv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 21, 2011 at 11:21 AM Congrats Susan on your special sixth place win with this elegant entry luv.. enjoy .. as we are enjoying our vacation in the hot Florida sunshine luv..

David Williams August 21, 2011 at 6:17 AM hey Susan congrats on your win, too true of many people, and it just takes one simple call,,, David

Andrea Dietrich August 19, 2011 at 11:57 AM I loved how you said it in the third couplet, like dandelion wisps. letting it get away. yes, it's a very sad thing, Susan.

Carolyn Devonshire August 17, 2011 at 12:55 PM This really touches a special place in my heart, Susan, as I'm sure it does for many readers. That "fluttering away" can result from failure to stay in communication or from a disagreement. It's hard to reunite, but it's always a goal for which we strive. Best wishes in the contest with this moving poem. Love, Carolyn

Carol Sunshine Brown August 17, 2011 at 9:48 AM Thank you for sharing your creative poetry with us Susan. I enjoyed reading it this morning. I will be back another time to read more. Love, Carol