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Soon To Be Dark

While walking the dog
the dark draws in so quickly…
Winter waking up

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Andrea Dietrich

November 14, 2016 at 9:01 PM

oh I just love your final line. SO COOL

Laura Hay

November 15, 2016 at 4:04 AM

Thanks a lot Andrea, warm regards, Laura.

Darren White

November 14, 2016 at 10:25 AM

The play with W... wonderful.

Laura Hay

November 14, 2016 at 3:57 PM

Thank you Darren and for stopping by, warm regards, Laura.

The Grahamburglar

September 29, 2016 at 5:21 PM

I've never quite gotten a handle on the short forms, so I am always impressed when others are able to put together something so coherent and visual with so few words. Very nicely done! -G

Laura Hay

October 14, 2016 at 5:53 AM

Much appreciate your kind feedback and for stopping by. Warm regards, Laura.

Eileen Manassian

September 24, 2016 at 3:34 AM

Great job on that last line, Laura. Good clincher to this lovely haiku. Hugs

Laura Hay

September 25, 2016 at 4:37 AM

Thanks so much Eileen! Warm regards, Laura

Paul Callus

September 23, 2016 at 1:05 PM

You create a lovely picture, Laura...I can imagine you hurrying back home from your walk:) What about having it all in the present tense:) Warm regards // paul

Paul Callus

September 26, 2016 at 11:28 AM

Laura Hay

September 26, 2016 at 10:18 AM

Drew now draws ;) , when i think of it, that is how i actually thought of it when the image came to my mind, but my grammar is not the best. ;)

Laura Hay

September 26, 2016 at 7:15 AM

I see what you mean now with regards present tense Paul. I guess i'd have to re-think it now. Always good to learn something new! So you speak as though in the moment. Lesson learned :) much appreciated, Laura.

Laura Hay

September 25, 2016 at 4:42 AM

Hi Paul thanks for that Paul, I like your suggestion, I assume you refer to the title? Suddenly night falls or The night fell upon me or Rushing home?? Perhaps I need to ponder... Thanks!! Warm regards, Laura