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Sonnet 33

If only I could open up your eyes, As waves and seas to see I am your man, Your soul would flow with water of my cries, Protecting me through storms as walls of damn. I float to love like flowers float amidst, Gardens of green on floors of summers earth. I swim to you my love, as fishes kiss, Through storm and rain, the womb of waters birth. To let me drown would die my heart that beats, A thousand sounds that sacrifice to swim, My days would surface what hot deserts greets, Dessert for death at dawn dried out and grim. Oh what a pleasure love brings to the well, Yet without water how love sings to hell.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 4/13/2012 2:49:00 PM
You have an English sonnet going here but wow did I get confused..open her yes like a wave? this makes me think she may be dead? a soul flwoing with water? what is he water of a cry? You are doing so well with the meter! [I float to love..GREAT!] but [like flowers float amidst?] in mist? [amidst the garden of green?] next 2 lines very NICE! [To let me drown would die my heart that beats]?? not sure what this means? anyway you sure got the meter thing down! Light 7 Love
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Date: 2/22/2012 12:38:00 PM
What wonderful poetry you all are sharing with us today. I have enjoyed reading yours today Johnny. I hope the rest of the week finds you with much inspiration in your heart and you will continue to share your writing. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/22/2012 5:05:00 AM
Sonnets are a bit tricky to write. You did well with this one. It all flows nicely. Jancarl
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Date: 2/22/2012 2:41:00 AM
Beautiful poem Johnny, unick written....like it. - oxox Anne-Lise
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