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Something Old Something New

Something Old Something New

Viola - Original


Admiring her beauty he was mesmerised
Her complete perfection brought tears to his eyes
Holding her tenderly in his loving arms
Slowly he caressed the magic of her charms.

This was the gift he had waited so long for
The answer to prayers he had made to the Lord
It felt quite spine tingling as his heart took flight
Sensing that he’d love her till close of his life.

As he held her within a loving caress 
His fingers traced o'er her with skill set finesse 
Feeling the joy to the world that she’d bestow
Strumming her heart strings music began to flow.

They got on well and lived happily in tune
She was his amulet to finding fortune
Together they made sweet music forever
Nothing but death could tear them apart ever.

He carried her in a case on his shoulder
The musical, adorable viola.
5th October 2021

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Viola - Updated
Taking her gently into his loving arms
Slowly caressing the mystique of her charms
Admiring her allure he was mesmerised
Her stunning elegance brought tears to his eyes.

Feeling electrified as his heart took flight
He sensed that he’d love her till close of his life
This was the gift he had prayed to the Lord for
As if by magic she’d appeared at his door.

His fingers slid o'er her with skill and finesse 
As he held her within a fervent caress
Strumming her heart strings music began to flow
He felt the joy that upon earth she’d bestow.

Nothing but death could separate them ever
Together they made sweet music forever
They got on well and dwelt merrily in tune
Roaming the world seeking stardom and fortune.

The admirable, musical viola
That he carried in a case on his shoulder.
19th October 2021

Something Old Something new Poetry Contest
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Unseeking Seeker Date: 6/8/2022 7:46:00 PM Enchanting! Both versions are so exquisitely crafted, although I still prefer the first one ~ congrats on your win Login to Reply

Ann Peck Date: 6/8/2022 3:47:00 PM Belle, So lovely and original! Congratulations on your First Place! Login to Reply

Malabika Ray Choudhury Date: 6/8/2022 2:02:00 PM Dear Belle, I love your enchantingly musical poem! This truly deserved a top win, and it did! Congratulations! Love and best wishes ~Mala Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 6/8/2022 2:13:00 PM Thank you so much Malabika, truly appreciated… Belle

David Kavanagh Date: 6/8/2022 9:07:00 AM It’s a great poem Belle, with so much musical metaphor going on throughout, and this lyrical approach works so well, congratulations on your win, cheers David Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 6/8/2022 10:08:00 AM Thank you David, so pleased you read this as it’s my personal favourite… Belle

Paula Goldsmith Date: 6/8/2022 9:01:00 AM Congratulations on your win. A lovely write. Have a blessed day writing away....................... Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 6/8/2022 10:07:00 AM Thank you Paula, you have a blessed day too writing lovely poems from you… Belle

Gershon Wolf Date: 11/10/2021 6:44:00 PM Somehow missing 'Viola' at the outset, your ending absolutely stunned me, bringing a huge smile to my face. Enchanting, Belle! Musical Magic, Gershon Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 11/12/2021 8:02:00 PM Thank you so much Gershon, I’m so pleased you got to read this poem as it’s a personal favourite of mine… Belle

Lindsay Laurie Date: 10/22/2021 7:18:00 PM Hello Belle ... both versions are very good. Certainly well written and most enjoyable to read Belle - Lindsay Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 10/23/2021 2:14:00 AM Thank you Lindsay Rey much… Belle

Panagiota Romios Date: 10/19/2021 4:54:00 AM Truly beautifully done. Absolutelty gorgeous, and a FaV, Best wishes Pangie. Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 10/19/2021 5:45:00 AM Than you so much Pangie, this is my personal all time favourite write, glad for the contest as I prefer the updated version. Best wishes to you too… Belle

Silpika Kalita Date: 10/19/2021 3:45:00 AM Dear Belle, a great fusion of metaphor, memory and metamorphosis, how you have recreated the magic of the older version of Viola is splendid! God bless the sublime pen! With best wishes, Silpika. Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 10/19/2021 5:42:00 AM Thank you Silpika, I wish I had the literature skills that you seem to have, I just write from my heart and my head, metaphor and metamorphosis I had to look up to see what they meant. Warm wishes… Belle

Victor Buhagiar Date: 10/19/2021 1:04:00 AM I loved both poems. You write with finesse. Best for a win. Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 10/19/2021 5:21:00 AM Thank you Victor, I truly do appreciate you and your uplifting comments… Belle

Sotto Poet Date: 10/18/2021 7:11:00 PM Something old, something new, you perfectly crafted the correct combination with great talent, and that's expected from a skillful poetess—my best wishes for the contest. Login to Reply Beryl Edmonds Date: 10/18/2021 7:19:00 PM Thank you so much Lasaad for your kind encouragement as always, I’m truly grateful… Belle