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Something Old Something New

Something Old Something New Viola - Original
Admiring her beauty he was mesmerised Her complete perfection brought tears to his eyes Holding her tenderly in his loving arms Slowly he caressed the magic of her charms. This was the gift he had waited so long for The answer to prayers he had made to the Lord It felt quite spine tingling as his heart took flight Sensing that he’d love her till close of his life. As he held her within a loving caress His fingers traced o'er her with skill set finesse Feeling the joy to the world that she’d bestow Strumming her heart strings music began to flow. They got on well and lived happily in tune She was his amulet to finding fortune Together they made sweet music forever Nothing but death could tear them apart ever. He carried her in a case on his shoulder The musical, adorable viola.
5th October 2021 * * * * * * * * * * * *
Viola - Updated
Taking her gently into his loving arms Slowly caressing the mystique of her charms Admiring her allure he was mesmerised Her stunning elegance brought tears to his eyes. Feeling electrified as his heart took flight He sensed that he’d love her till close of his life This was the gift he had prayed to the Lord for As if by magic she’d appeared at his door. His fingers slid o'er her with skill and finesse As he held her within a fervent caress Strumming her heart strings music began to flow He felt the joy that upon earth she’d bestow. Nothing but death could separate them ever Together they made sweet music forever They got on well and dwelt merrily in tune Roaming the world seeking stardom and fortune. The admirable, musical viola That he carried in a case on his shoulder.
19th October 2021 Something Old Something new Poetry Contest Sponsored by : John Lawless
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Seeker Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 7:46 PM
Enchanting! Both versions are so exquisitely crafted, although I still prefer the first one ~ congrats on your win
Peck Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 3:47 PM
Belle, So lovely and original! Congratulations on your First Place!
Ray Choudhury Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 2:02 PM
Dear Belle, I love your enchantingly musical poem! This truly deserved a top win, and it did! Congratulations! Love and best wishes ~Mala
Edmonds  Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 2:13 PM
Thank you so much Malabika, truly appreciated… Belle
Kavanagh  Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 9:07 AM
It’s a great poem Belle, with so much musical metaphor going on throughout, and this lyrical approach works so well, congratulations on your win, cheers David
Edmonds  Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 10:08 AM
Thank you David, so pleased you read this as it’s my personal favourite… Belle
Goldsmith Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 9:01 AM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely write. Have a blessed day writing away.......................
Edmonds  Avatar
June 8, 2022 at 10:07 AM
Thank you Paula, you have a blessed day too writing lovely poems from you… Belle
Wolf Avatar
November 10, 2021 at 6:44 PM
Somehow missing 'Viola' at the outset, your ending absolutely stunned me, bringing a huge smile to my face. Enchanting, Belle! Musical Magic, Gershon
Edmonds  Avatar
November 12, 2021 at 8:02 PM
Thank you so much Gershon, I’m so pleased you got to read this poem as it’s a personal favourite of mine… Belle
Laurie Avatar
October 22, 2021 at 7:18 PM
Hello Belle ... both versions are very good. Certainly well written and most enjoyable to read Belle - Lindsay
Edmonds  Avatar
October 23, 2021 at 2:14 AM
Thank you Lindsay Rey much… Belle
Romios Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 4:54 AM
Truly beautifully done. Absolutelty gorgeous, and a FaV, Best wishes Pangie.
Edmonds  Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 5:45 AM
Than you so much Pangie, this is my personal all time favourite write, glad for the contest as I prefer the updated version. Best wishes to you too… Belle
Kalita Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 3:45 AM
Dear Belle, a great fusion of metaphor, memory and metamorphosis, how you have recreated the magic of the older version of Viola is splendid! God bless the sublime pen! With best wishes, Silpika.
Edmonds  Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 5:42 AM
Thank you Silpika, I wish I had the literature skills that you seem to have, I just write from my heart and my head, metaphor and metamorphosis I had to look up to see what they meant. Warm wishes… Belle
Buhagiar Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 1:04 AM
I loved both poems. You write with finesse. Best for a win.
Edmonds  Avatar
October 19, 2021 at 5:21 AM
Thank you Victor, I truly do appreciate you and your uplifting comments… Belle
Poet Avatar
October 18, 2021 at 7:11 PM
Something old, something new, you perfectly crafted the correct combination with great talent, and that's expected from a skillful poetess—my best wishes for the contest.
Edmonds  Avatar
October 18, 2021 at 7:19 PM
Thank you so much Lasaad for your kind encouragement as always, I’m truly grateful… Belle
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