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Little girl Spaces in teeth Who watches when you twirl? Cheap flattery to keep you spinning in a whirl You no longer dance for the forest Just the trees that take no root or water but you thought you could quench Thought a little love would come with patience Little girl Hips out of reach Who told you to wait? Don't forget your youth underneath the hunger and the heat There's plenty more meat with extra to eat You give out words with every bit of you to men who don't think twice of you and when they reach out to you they know just where to find you Little girl Loud and meek God wants to know Tonight while you think of futures bleak How much for the next dance does He owe?

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Date: 7/3/2015 4:05:00 PM
I don't know if I ever answered your comment of a while back. This is an interesting piece. I hope you will continue to write for us. There is a lot of distress in this world of ours.
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Date: 3/19/2014 10:46:00 AM
Dear Asante Your soul weeps in this stellar poetic heart breaker! You are an awesome poet. My best,7 chuck
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Date: 3/15/2014 2:55:00 PM
Nice mood and tone, Graceful Good work Asante
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Date: 3/5/2014 1:32:00 PM
I like the pace of your deep poem to that literary little girl. It flows well! Well done, Asante!!!
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Date: 2/22/2014 9:07:00 AM
Asante brilliant and moving work. Hopefully she knows how much God does love her.
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Date: 2/16/2014 4:22:00 PM
Dear Asante You are an out of the box brilliant writer! this freedom of style you possess carries me away! 7+ In admiration, chuck
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Date: 2/12/2014 7:50:00 AM
"You no longer dance for the forest Just the trees that take no root or water but you thought you could quench Thought a little love would come with patience" I Like the metaphor used in this verse.
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Date: 2/8/2014 8:01:00 AM
beautifully crafted piece
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Date: 2/7/2014 11:30:00 PM
This is very good...I love the rhythm!!! Smooth
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