Something About Some Things

Little girl
Spaces in teeth
Who watches when you twirl?
Cheap flattery to keep 
you spinning in a whirl

You no longer dance for the forest
Just the trees that take no root or water
but you thought you could quench
Thought a little love would come with patience

Little girl
Hips out of reach
Who told you to wait?
Don't forget your youth underneath
the hunger and the heat
There's plenty more meat
with extra to eat

You give out words with every bit of you
to men who don't think twice of you
and when they reach out to you
they know just where to find you

Little girl
Loud and meek
God wants to know
Tonight while you think of futures bleak
How much for the next dance does He owe?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 7/3/2015 4:05:00 PM
I don't know if I ever answered your comment of a while back. This is an interesting piece. I hope you will continue to write for us. There is a lot of distress in this world of ours.
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Date: 3/19/2014 10:46:00 AM
Dear Asante Your soul weeps in this stellar poetic heart breaker! You are an awesome poet. My best,7 chuck
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Date: 3/15/2014 2:55:00 PM
Nice mood and tone, Graceful Good work Asante
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Date: 3/5/2014 1:32:00 PM
I like the pace of your deep poem to that literary little girl. It flows well! Well done, Asante!!!
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Date: 2/22/2014 9:07:00 AM
Asante brilliant and moving work. Hopefully she knows how much God does love her.
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Date: 2/16/2014 4:22:00 PM
Dear Asante You are an out of the box brilliant writer! this freedom of style you possess carries me away! 7+ In admiration, chuck
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Date: 2/12/2014 7:50:00 AM
"You no longer dance for the forest Just the trees that take no root or water but you thought you could quench Thought a little love would come with patience" I Like the metaphor used in this verse.
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Date: 2/8/2014 8:01:00 AM
beautifully crafted piece
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Date: 2/7/2014 11:30:00 PM
This is very good...I love the rhythm!!! Smooth
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