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Someone Tell Me Please

Driving in my car
not too very far,
I take a cleansing breath, then
let the air release. 
Is this done for peace?
I don’t even practice Zen.

Somewhere I once read:
Bodies should be fed
with a lot of oxygen.
Burn more calories!
Someone tell me please:
Those results. . . I’ll notice when??

Written by Andrea Dietrich

Inspired by nette onclaud's
ALOUTTE YOUR CLEANSING RITE Poetry Contest

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Robin Davis

Date: 8/22/2014 8:05:00 PM

Andrea A cute and humorous write. Breath in, breath out. Repeat over and over till you get skinny or pass out LOL thank you for the nice comment on my Addiction poem

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/28/2011 4:25:00 PM

OH my it takes a lot of IN & OUT breathing..remember when Gran said count to 10 well at least ten to calm down I think..the repetition of the deep breathing during times of stress will over time teach your body what you want it to do CALM DOWN! light & love

Caryl Ramsdale

Date: 9/7/2011 10:45:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in the "ALOUTTE YOUR CLEANSING RITE" poetry contest sponsored by nette onclaud. CR

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/6/2011 6:49:00 PM

Contratulations on the win in the contest, andrea

Tony Lane

Date: 9/6/2011 1:10:00 PM

great job for you. Tony

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/6/2011 11:06:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in Nette's contest Andrea. Love, Carol

Margaret Foster

Date: 9/6/2011 5:24:00 AM

A humourous little piece. Who invented calories anyway? I never heard of them 'til I grew up. ( and out ) congrats Marg

John Freeman

Date: 9/5/2011 11:00:00 PM

Haaaaaaaaaaa! yep me too. Congratulations on your win Andrea. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/5/2011 6:08:00 PM

WAY TO GO ANDREA MY FRIEND.. MORE CONGRATS FOR MORE CREATIVITY..THIS ALOUETTE IS SUPER CREATIVE LUV..

Jack Horne

Date: 9/5/2011 3:58:00 PM

Many congrats on all your wins, Andrea : ) And a very happy (belated) birthday, my friend xxx

David Williams

Date: 9/5/2011 3:31:00 PM

hey Andrea congrats on your win, am constantly burning calories..David

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 8/31/2011 5:37:00 PM

Cute little poem and yes by taking deep breaths only 4 or 5 and sucking in the stomach and letting the breath out slow we can lose weight around our bellies. so now you have an answer and it is about a month. love phyl soup mail

Jack Horne

Date: 8/31/2011 6:48:00 AM

LOL, I love this witty piece

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 8/29/2011 10:15:00 AM

love the questioning ending - very realistic. Enjoyed feeling as if i'm inside your head in this poem - 'in Andrea's head' would make a good title for a future poem. good luck in the contest.

Tony Lane

Date: 8/29/2011 9:45:00 AM

Good one Andrea, good one. Made me laugh. Tony

Kash Poet

Date: 8/29/2011 6:14:00 AM

hmmm witty write.Are u sure that wasn't a deep sigh?LOL....best wishes:)

Wilma Neels

Date: 8/29/2011 4:54:00 AM

hehe, good question Andrea as soon as you get the answer will you let me know?? Good luck for the contest, love Wilma

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer

Date: 8/29/2011 1:17:00 AM

Nice one Andrea! Speaking of burning cals. I better hit the gym in the am. I had pizza AND german choc. cake tonight :) Thanks much for your nice comments too. Love, Natalie

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/29/2011 12:34:00 AM

very nice piece and cleansing ritual Andrea.. luv that last line.. Mondays are our weigh in days ..though I am dreading tomorrow.. haha.. slowly it comes off ..so slowly..good luck in the contest..Nette will luv..

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/29/2011 12:03:00 AM

Great poem! Love the "I don't even practice Zen," line...such a great line! I don't think we'll ever get the results on that one! Awesome job!! Good luck in the contest!!