David Kavanagh Poet Monorhyme

Some Lines Go Unsaid

silent words of dread
                i recite each night in bed
                  too late now your dead 
                      one reality ahead
         miming what should have been said 


Your Best Monorhyme Poetry Contest
Set in Tanka form 
Sponsored by: William Kekaula 
15/08/2021

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Susan Ashley August 28, 2021 at 7:37 PM Dear David, your poem’s poignant regrets are beautifully expressed. Congratulations for your excellent win in William’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan David Kavanagh August 29, 2021 at 12:42 AM Thank you Susan I so appreciate the visit, a life lesson we find out for ourselves, always when its too late to redress, cheers David

William Kelii Kekaula August 20, 2021 at 8:39 PM Melancholic turned I, wrapped tight or left looking somewhere, "If only I had?!" A hearty thanks, David, for sharing your absorbing and profound talents, Aloha! David Kavanagh August 21, 2021 at 12:59 AM Thank you William I’m delighted with your placement and comments, We learn this lesson the hard way, by taking others for granted, I certainly have, cheers David

Krish Radhakrishna June 5, 2021 at 4:22 AM Just brilliant!! congrats on your win!! David Kavanagh June 5, 2021 at 4:34 AM Hello Krish, thank you for the visit, it’s one of those we learn from our mistakes, well I certainly have anyway, cheers David

Sotto Poet June 2, 2021 at 12:34 PM Congratulations on your very well-deserved win. I don't know how I have missed these wonderfully panned Tanks. you did a superb job, David David Kavanagh June 2, 2021 at 12:40 PM Thank you Lasaad, as always I appreciate you opining on my poems, I’m delighted with this good placement in Kai’s contest, cheers David

Gary Radice June 2, 2021 at 10:02 AM Back to say congratulations in Kai's competition. Cheers - Gary

Gary Radice May 14, 2021 at 12:15 AM David, yes. Regret. This poem has made me reflect on that saying about regret: It's better to regret things you said than things you didn't. The hurt can cut deep. I feel your pain and love your poem. Cheers - Gary David Kavanagh May 14, 2021 at 2:06 AM Heya Gary yes indeed it’s a life lesson, a very bitter one to swallow, as I learned for myself when it was too late, I definitely don’t take anything for granted now and try to live life that way, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty May 9, 2021 at 4:44 PM If i die before i wake David Kavanagh May 10, 2021 at 12:27 AM Not really Christopher, more about living with the guilt, of not having said the all important lines to a loved one, too late now they are dead, cheers David

Daniel Turner May 9, 2021 at 3:27 PM Short and to the point with a lesson all should take to heart. Nicely penned, David:) Good luck! David Kavanagh May 9, 2021 at 3:34 PM Nothing worse than regret Daniel, I have been guilty, but am trying to learn from it, thanks so much for looking in, cheers David