Paul Callus Poet Monoku

Solitude

eyes closed behind dark sunglasses - alone with my thoughts	

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Contest: Monoku/One liner #4
Sponsor: Poet Destroyer A
Placed 2nd
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Also inspired by this theme, but not for contest:

a) away from it all, alone, but never lonely

b) no illusion or disillusion...charging batteries

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Red Fiery March 19, 2016 at 8:36 AM These words are not simply words... They define us and our life... Great write Paul ! I have always been impressed... Hugs Red Paul Callus March 19, 2016 at 9:52 AM And I'm always impressed by your comments, Red:) Thank you! Have a lovely weekend. ~ hugs ~~ paul

Connie Marcum Wong February 11, 2016 at 1:50 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win Paul! Paul Callus March 19, 2016 at 9:11 AM Thank you once again, Connie; I am sure that I replied to your comment before, but coming back to this post today I realized that I have nothing to show for it! ~ All the best // paul

Anindya Mohan Tagore February 10, 2016 at 12:28 PM Wonderful take, Paul. Other two monokus are also awesome. Cheers, Bobby Paul Callus February 10, 2016 at 4:00 PM Glad that you like it (them), Anindya. Thank you for the lovely comments. ~ Regards // paul

Susan Gentry February 10, 2016 at 2:52 AM Congratulations Paul on your win with this awesome line. Paul Callus February 10, 2016 at 4:01 PM Thank you, Susan; your support is appreciated. ~ Regards // paul

Poet Destroyer A February 9, 2016 at 5:25 PM hello, PAUL, Congratulations On your TOP win. I truly enjoyed every entry placed on the winning list. Stop by my latest blog "Silence Ululates" if you like. Always & Forever ~LINDA~ Paul Callus February 10, 2016 at 3:05 PM Thank you Linda. I appreciate being on your winning list, especially since there were so many nice entries. It was not an easy contest to judge! hugs // paul

Sandra Adams February 7, 2016 at 9:32 AM this one speaks volumes in so few words... sometimes my shades hide tears when i am not so alone with my thoughts... good luck in the contest, this is a form i do not believe i have ever attempted! Paul Callus February 7, 2016 at 12:53 PM Thank you for reading, Sandra; I hope there won't be too many reasons to shed tears:( Looking forward to read your first monoku:) ~ Regards // paul

Len Gasun February 7, 2016 at 7:15 AM This is a wonderful monoku my dear friend, Paul. In solitude,we also find solemnity of thoughts. I think this must really be how monoku is written and I can see it's almost the same as what I've read to many but I don't know how to revise mine yet. Anyway, Good luck to both of us my dear friend. Thanks for sharing and reading mine. love lots and Hugs, Galeo Paul Callus February 7, 2016 at 12:49 PM As always very pleased with your feedback, Leonora. I am no monoku expert, but I am a keen learner...on a continuous learning process! All the best and big hugs // paul

Charmaine Chircop February 6, 2016 at 5:49 PM We are never lonely indeed. Our thoughts are always with us. I can't just picture the image of someone closing his eyes behind sun-glasses lost in thought..but I can feel this.I've been there.Yoy are so good at this short form..that speaks volumes. Paul Callus February 6, 2016 at 5:59 PM Thank you Charm:) These one-liners are quite similar to classic/modern haiku/senryu; I find them handy to use when I want to capture a quick thought or image. ~ Regards // paul

Luaer Solnox February 5, 2016 at 1:57 PM For me, I can hear the breaking of the waves. This was very calming, thanks Paul. Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 2:40 PM I can hear those waves, too, Luaer! Thank you for reading and commenting/ ~Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud February 5, 2016 at 12:10 PM a gem of a monoku, paul... in solace do we find peace... lovely metaphors!..huggs Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 12:36 PM Thank you, Nette. I am pleased that you like it. Have a lovely weekend...hugs ... paul

Emile Pinet February 5, 2016 at 11:01 AM A poem offering quiet reflection on the virtues of being alone. Emile. Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 12:02 PM Thank you for reading and commenting, Emile. ~ All the best // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen February 5, 2016 at 7:44 AM - Often a good feeling, but can also be sad - Luck in contest, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 11:58 AM Thank you Anne Lise:) Solitude can do us lots of good, but as with other things, overdoses can be fatal! ~ Have a lovely weekend! hugs // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis February 5, 2016 at 7:34 AM Wonderfully done, dear Paul! Good luck and a seven! Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 8:43 AM Thank you my friend Demi! Both lovely comment and the 7 are appreciated. ~ Regards // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser February 5, 2016 at 4:21 AM I love your take Paul, like the letter b though.. =`) i thought the charging batteries is cute!!! =`) but all are great but that's the one i most like! =`)~Olive ELoisa =`) Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 11:45 AM Thank you for reading and liking, Olive_eloi:) The older the batteries get, they need charging more often:) Hugs // paul

Barbara Gorelick February 5, 2016 at 12:23 AM My favorite so far! BG Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 10:59 AM Thank you Barbara...glad you liked it:) ~ Regards // paul

John Lawless February 4, 2016 at 10:35 PM Ah, the camouflage of the profession nap taker....nicely done Paul Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 9:42 AM Smiling at your comment, John:) Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Timothy Hicks February 4, 2016 at 6:28 PM Good monoku Paul! I've never known what to think of someone when they wear dark glasses ... you couldn't tell whether their eyes were open or closed ... almost like wearing a mask. But this has a more zen quality which is fitting for haiku (or monoku). Long time no see, my friend. Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 9:28 AM Great to see you Timothy! Yes...it has been a long time! Thank you for enjoying and commenting on my humble monoku. I already checked out your poems, but still no new posts in sight...waiting:) ~ Regards // paul

David Mohn February 4, 2016 at 6:07 PM you could have gone with any of these Paul...fabulous Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 9:23 AM You are generous, David:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Jan Allison February 4, 2016 at 4:35 PM Gosh you are on a roll with these Paul good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus February 5, 2016 at 9:15 AM Hi Jan...txs for being the first to comment:) All 3 versions came to mind in the space of 5 mins; took me longer to decide which one to enter for the contest:) hugs // paul