Sole Soul

I once thought we were one, that you were my soul mate until I realized that our joint passion for a specific salt water flatfish cooked in meuniere sauce was not sufficient to maintain a long lasting relationship

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D.W. Rodgers

Date: 3/17/2018 2:32:00 PM

Make that 34 syllables - still a challenge.

Keith Osborne
Date: 3/18/2018 5:30:00 PM

I think it gets a little too wordy after 21. Again, very nice job on this whimsical piece.

Keith Osborne

Date: 3/16/2018 4:17:00 PM

I enjoy this. And, so far, you are the only fibonacci writer to have 21 syllables in their final line. Where they get 23 i will never know. My only minor issue with this one is that you accidentally omited the 3 syllable line. But nicely done!

D.W. Rodgers
Date: 3/17/2018 2:30:00 PM

Thanks Keith, 3 syllable line now added. Adding a 44 syllable would be a challange,