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Soldier's 4th of July

He sits on the edge of the hill his abode from a society that shattered his dreams he can hear the echo of thunder in the valley below see bombs of color burst all around as he looks for a place to take cover his mind is cocked and fully loaded he knows the constitution well the second amendment his right to bear arms and his hopes of survival he sees the tallies of bodies of those that have fallen before him as he crawls on the ground like a lioness on the prowl unaware the war has ended through dissociation of past and present he sees the same scene over and over in his mind mines exploding, soldiers imploding planes offloading guns reloading his thoughts overloading he lapses back to the current moment as the grand finale ends and silence falls the only sensual touch he knows is from his faithful dog who remains by his side he pets his head towers to his feet as he wipes a tear from his face july 6 2019 Another Eight Word Challenge Poetry Contest Sponsored by Kai Michael Neumann

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Date: 7/8/2019 11:58:00 AM
This is very meaningful and bears sad truths. A 4th July message for every day ...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/8/2019 3:57:00 PM
it is sad... they fought for a country that won't fight back for them and help them find comfort again! hugs :)
Date: 7/8/2019 9:38:00 AM
Superbly done my friend...best for a win...and a Fav...sending love...^WW^...:o)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/8/2019 3:58:00 PM
Thank you...it's just what my muse drug out of the given words....funny how all minds go on different paths with the same sets of words....:) hugs
Date: 7/8/2019 12:17:00 AM
This is one powerful poem Sandra. mines exploding, soldiers imploding, planes offloading, guns reloading,his thoughts overloading...WOW. Well written. Good luck in the contest. I think it's a winner!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/8/2019 4:00:00 PM
Awww thank you Jeanne...perhaps it's because of the holiday at hand that my muse conjured this up out of those words! hugs :)
Date: 7/7/2019 10:05:00 PM
"he crawls on the ground like a lioness on the prowl unaware the war has ended through dissociation of past and present" - this is why the fireworks bother me. They are supposed to honour veterans, and yet they terrify many of them. Great job, Sandra!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/8/2019 4:01:00 PM
I have seen it first hand a few years back but it obviously stuck with me to come out in this poem.... thank you :) hugs
Date: 7/7/2019 4:47:00 PM
A bit reminiscent of 'All Quiet on the Western Front, Sandra. Vividly imaged. Best of luck in the contest. ~ gw
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Sandra Adams
Date: 7/7/2019 5:50:00 PM
Thank you... my muse took off with the word constitution before all the other words had a chance to cause a reaction! hugs :)

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